on Gone by Katie2
27 Mar 2003, 8:35 AM
I've been there, good job on showing your feelings, but i agree it could use more imagery. Try to make the reader feel the pain, dont just describe it.
on A Well Worth Wait by savannah
27 Oct 2002, 5:21 AM
good content but could use more of a rythmic feel
on Meaning........ by Hispanic_gurl2004
27 Oct 2002, 5:32 AM
a lot of thought into it, but it culd use a little structure work, but since its just basic free verse its ok
on Sympathy for a Pig by phbiscuit
27 Oct 2002, 5:34 AM
i like the general concept of it and it flows rather well
on some deleted poem
26 Oct 2002, 5:32 PM
very negative... i might give it a higher score if i was more into the style of it
on My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus
26 Oct 2002, 5:38 PM
not exactly a haiku but i guess it works...