| Re: a comment on Report Card by Rex Karrs |
9-May-03/3:34 PM |
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It is not so much that I wanted to surprise the reader, but more that I wanted to portray the impact, and how it caught me.
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| Re: first kiss by lost in america |
1-May-03/7:30 AM |
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Very nice. That moment you can feel when everything changes, well captured.
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| Re: a comment on Dogwood Winter by Rex Karrs |
24-Apr-03/2:58 PM |
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In the North, Dogwood Winter is a weather-based time of year, similiar in that way to Indian Summer. It usually means a late snow or frost and a few cold days following the first of Spring. In the Southern States, I believe they use the phrase "Blackberry Winter".
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| Re: After Halloween by Limness |
14-Oct-02/8:58 PM |
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I have to hold my breath when I read this, for fear of disturbing this fragile scene. Limness, this poem swallowed me whole and held me in that singular instant. A 10, like yourself.
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| Re: Kindling by <~> |
14-Oct-02/8:37 PM |
Nice work Zinny! Perhpas your most sensual yet, in the literary sense. BUT... Kindling is the beginings, right? the small pieces that fuel the bonfire? And the beginings of sensuality are all about hints and innuendo. All this to say, don't be so obvious in using the word FIRE three times... What is it that Pops and Hisses? The fireplace? The Oak, the Maple ? The last of the Cherry from some forgotten Orchard? The Sapling pine not yet aged and hard?. Leave "Built Fire" - it works there, because you leave out the article "a" so it defines a very different thing you've created. So maybe he says "The Flame does this to us." I dunno.
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| Re: one is leaving as i enter by Limness |
8-Oct-02/10:58 AM |
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Another "Five out of Six" poem?
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| Re: a comment on Russian Roulette by <~> |
8-Oct-02/8:54 AM |
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I love this zzzzinny. I hope you didn't discard Stanza one. It works on its own as a single poem as well. Just title it "Five out of Six" - I've noticed your poems tend harbour other poems inside.
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| Re: a comment on Bobbing for Apples by Rex Karrs |
5-Oct-02/12:23 PM |
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Thanks for the encouragement. I must say, this one was harder to write - I just don't do as well with the "happier" ones. Its harder to stay in the spirit.
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| Re: Morning Glory by waltfreakinwhitman |
5-Oct-02/12:08 PM |
I actually think this is brilliant. Can't understand the negative responses. Right up there with Anne Sexton's "Fury of Cocks".
If I give it a high vote will I sacrifice your place in the worst list?
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| Re: Taffy by knickytoy |
28-Sep-02/9:00 AM |
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Sort of a New England "Like Water for Chocolate" - I ate this one up.
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| Re: a comment on Taffy by knickytoy |
28-Sep-02/8:59 AM |
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thanks for awakening my York Beach memories, Lenore.
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| Re: To You, In Warmer Climes by <~> |
28-Sep-02/8:43 AM |
I love this one. The last stanza sticks with me like "a dart to the heart" (Thank you Bruce Cockburn)
Should Mercury be capitilized in the last line? 9
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| Re: Russian Roulette by <~> |
28-Sep-02/8:28 AM |
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Zinni - I avoided reading this one because of the title - too obvious and somewhat pedantic. I think you could lose the whole first stanza, not water down the focus; which is the ones left behind (as it always is) and not glorify the act. I can only think of Virgina Hamilton Adair's poem on her husband's suicide, "one ordinary evening" 8
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