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After Halloween (Other) by Limness
Dust violet powders the distance Displaced sunset sneaks in under Glaucomic clouds that steal my light Silver smooth skinned ghosts Don November's steely greys Tall thin reachers-out-over roads Mix timbered fingers in the air Incanting their alchemy Winter comes, Winter comes The sky a scaled and inverse sea Night is early To feast on rusted hills Her cape subdues the heated trees Summer is old, jilted Her bright sun left angry Burnt colors onto trees Orange yellow red flamed alight Bright, brief, fallen now Whisper quietly, Cooly fade to browns Crisp skeletons Circling scatterings, Pageantry abandoned Airs shift drifts of papery hues past due Feet meet nothing solid, so Deep I slide and swim in them And, feeling Frost I take a narrow path Towards home, where Sleep lies, miles away

Up the ladder: A-Team, vol I
Down the ladder: HATTIE

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.928571
Weighted score: 5.67884
Overall Rank: 2000
Posted: September 9, 2002 9:10 PM PDT; Last modified: September 10, 2002 7:56 AM PDT
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[7] Katie @ 169.139.16.2 | 13-Sep-02/8:57 AM | Reply
hm...interesting poem indeed. There's some things I myself would change but over all... i'll rate a 7/10 =)
[10] Rex Karrs @ 64.12.96.237 | 14-Oct-02/8:58 PM | Reply
I have to hold my breath when I read this, for fear of disturbing this fragile scene. Limness, this poem swallowed me whole and held me in that singular instant. A 10, like yourself.
[8] god'swife @ 209.179.134.18 | 14-Oct-02/11:47 PM | Reply
Stanza 2 is so perfect in it's vocalization. Lovely and sweet. Like hard candy rolled around in my mouth. I am a connoiseur of intelligent sorrow. Birds of a feather and all that. Thank you for the bittersweet treat.
[9] smlink84 @ 205.186.134.180 | 16-Jan-03/9:30 PM | Reply
Reminds me of Frost
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