Re: Mice by MacFrantic	6-Jul-07/11:13 AM
nice rhythm. the rhymes are a little overused though. "pretend" "end" and "best" "test" and "run" "sun" they seem a little elementary.
Re: Runaway by Cougarchic	6-Jul-07/11:07 AM
i think this could be shortened, or slightly less repetitive, you use the same word- ex stayed and run and away too often. change it up a little.
Re: I never Knew..... by SkateBoardGurl5799	5-Jul-07/2:13 PM
sounds like another tragic washed-up teenage story. far too common.
Re: Understand by Luv2write	5-Jul-07/2:09 PM
expresses something that i think everyone has felt at some time or another. very true.
Re: Aesgntor by MacFrantic	2-Jul-07/7:55 AM
wonderful.
Re: Sweet Anguish by sonawrote	1-Jul-07/4:13 PM
didnt like it at first but after reading it a few times i think it grows on you.
Re: A Way to Wander by MacFrantic	1-Jul-07/4:09 PM
makes you think. interesting.
Re: To My Little Known Love by MacFrantic	29-Jun-07/10:29 AM
it seems slightly repetitave, and overall sad, but it's something that a lot of people can relate to.
Re: a dream by lmp	29-Jun-07/10:26 AM
i enjoy reading it, it definately has a happy feeing to it.
Re: China, Silver, and an Emerald Lipstick by Enkidu	28-Jun-07/11:57 AM
it's sad that it's so true. well written though.
Re: Q For Some Reason by MacFrantic	28-Jun-07/11:56 AM
could be the story of a teenagers life these days. thoughtful.