Re: Kaolin Fire is SHIT by poemwanker	28-Dec-05/11:31 AM
I am speechless!
Re: sick and demented by sk8boardandpoems	28-Dec-05/11:27 AM
I commited the same sin with punctuation - so this advise comes from experience. This is a wad of chewing tobacco that will choke the reader right into leaving. note - could of/NO - could HAVE/yes use caps for pronoun I - proofread for spelling and punctuation, as well as grammar. If you are new to poetry, please do not bristle at critiques - as I have a keen tendency to do. I assure you my remarks come from an Editor's standpoint and the desire to help young people use the English language.
Re: Im different so what? by xblackstarsx	28-Dec-05/11:21 AM
This sounds like a rant. Not to do with poetry, but anger. It looks hurriedly done and slapped together. Not capitalizing I - i - is an affectation. You must proofread or no one will take you seriously. I understand your rage - but present it boldly done, and seriously done. Spelling such as, Kewl always turns me off. Use the English language, we all know what cool is. Harness your emotions into well done form and they can give heft to your work.
Re: Ode to necrophilia by Bobjim	28-Dec-05/11:05 AM
I think you are relying on shock value to carry your write. The lines "sorry, where was I", and "uh, anyway" really disturb the flow. Granny grinding and necrophelia are disturbing concepts that need to be offered with much more seriousness and devotion to art.
Re: a comment on Ennui by Sisterwolf	28-Dec-05/10:57 AM
Since your pointing out my error, I deleted the first version. I know that somehow that will be wrong too and bring wrath. I am sliding off into the sunset, as I can't get the hang of things.
Re: a comment on Ennui by Sisterwolf	28-Dec-05/10:54 AM
Sisterwolf has had major brain damage from DV - she couldn't figure out how to delete properly, or she would have deleted the first version.
Re: a comment on Ennui by Sisterwolf	27-Dec-05/7:39 PM
I do not judge people. Your education level would not necessarily be of interest to me, as long as your reactions were fair. Granted, as I am self-educated, you have far more academic practice. I do not think this precludes me being able to write good poetry. I have been published in slicks, paid publications. I highly respect Kenyon and would be delighted with directions to your work there. I am disabled with mental health problems, therefore my reactions are much more personal and dramatic. . . sometimes I have to remember to act within the acceptable parameters of the situation. Short stories are my forte - but poetry runs in my blood. I cannot stay here, for I would never be confident again. I will take your advice, I appreciate help - offered matter of factly. Throwing in POTM was a childish knee-jerk reaction. You have a great talent, I have to defend mine -
Re: a comment on Ennui by Sisterwolf	26-Dec-05/9:30 PM
Explain "english needs a lot of brushing", please. I really want to know.
Re: a comment on Broken Bird by Sisterwolf	26-Dec-05/9:28 PM
The irony of it all is that I don't think it is a very good poem! Thankfully for my ego I was just told I am one of the people in the vote for POTM at my favorite site. I shall wrap myself in the blood-soaked garment and chew it for its nourishment.
Re: a comment on Broken Bird by Sisterwolf	26-Dec-05/8:09 PM
Your wit is delightful. I imagine he likes me as much as he likes tooth pain, but that is okay. I am so sorry to cause such a ruckus. I am 60 year-old and disabled from domestic abuse - I am sensitive and this kind of critiquing is not the place for me. I am posting one last one.
Re: a comment on Obituary for the Moon by wilco	23-Dec-05/1:44 PM
Is such harsh critic, and ignorant language helpful to the poet?
Re: Obituary for the Moon by wilco	23-Dec-05/1:41 PM
Very unique voice here. Edgy and filled with imagery. Good stuff here.
Re: Zin/Enough/Things/Squeeze/Flow by gregsamsa222	23-Dec-05/1:39 PM
Stunning work. I adore the poetic device of reverse chronology - it gives it a stronger feeling of the death. Though it is long, it is a great read and kept my attention right through. Good job!