Re: a comment on The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	25-Nov-05/9:47 AM
Nothing too groundbreaking. I'm just starting by grabbing a bunch of words that I find striking, picking a topic and putting as many of those words in while still maintaining something meaningful(kind of a backwards approach). I also wanted to see how far I could take loose rhyme while keeping the scheme in the stanzas the same. Dictionary.com's backlist of "words of the day" is like a goldmine for the stumped writer. p.s. This approach has probably been done before but it's new to me. I love when I experiment with artforms because I have no idea what kind of reaction I'm going to get. It's curiously thrilling.
Re: a comment on Due Consideration by Dovina	25-Nov-05/4:36 AM
She's gonna be a character in one of your novels. I can just feel it.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	25-Nov-05/4:27 AM
I've had a lot of reasons for not sleeping with a girl. Stupidity was never one of them. God I'm such a stereotype.
Re: The Dreamhole by cyan9	25-Nov-05/4:19 AM
It does sound like a lyric, doesn't it. Pretty catchy one too.
Re: a comment on The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	25-Nov-05/4:11 AM
Thanks. I'm trying a different approach to writing poetry.
Re: a comment on The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	25-Nov-05/4:09 AM
Poe's or your's? (har-har) You're right of course. It's too focused on one aspect right now. I only wrote it just today and I knew I'd need to broaden it. I just wasn't sure it was worth the bother. It all started with something you said about words you keep on your refrigerator. I did my own version of that and decided on a topic and set out to use at least a few of them in the poem. I chose the worm for these reasons: A conqueror, underground activity, biblical reference, drills into the ground, shiftyness and for the "W". The worm isn't death in this poem although he brings it. The worm is "W". I just can't think of anything yet that fits him better. Once agian I agree with you. There's not enough twists and turns in the road this poem takes. What was your interpretation of the poem's meaning? I wasn't sure if I was being too vague or not enough.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	25-Nov-05/12:33 AM
I think your subject is a great one and you should work on this till you hit on something big. I want you to surprise me with things I've never heard from any woman. Tell me the thoughts of women 50 years from now. This is my challenge to you. If you meet it I'll give you a "You go girl" and declare women the superior sex.
Re: A Modern Woman by Dovina	24-Nov-05/6:01 AM
How is that modern. My grandmother could do all those things and probably did and her lifestyle was never more modern than what you might see on The Waltons. Unfortunately you can't meet her because she died in the late 80s. Maybe change modern to free and you might have more of a statement. The first stanza has nice rhythm.
Re: a comment on The Fall of Marvin Hyde by cyan9	23-Nov-05/10:26 AM
I see. The body creates it's own highly addictive drugs and this can usually be sited as a main factor in why people will do things that make them appear to be on synthetic drugs. I'm glad to hear that this is coming from a sober mind. Somehow it seems to make the poem better knowing that.
Re: a comment on i dream in nine minute increments by ay deee	23-Nov-05/5:14 AM
Nightmare On Elm Street. Cheap joke. I wasn't trying to say anything bad about your poem. The dream logic in it is pretty good. Is there a specific reason for not capitalizing?
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	23-Nov-05/5:07 AM
I'm saddened that you don't trust me after all this time. :(
Re: a comment on Due Consideration by Dovina	22-Nov-05/2:26 PM
Yeah. Look what they did to poor sweet little innocent Bethy.
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	22-Nov-05/2:10 PM
Ah, we come the old how do I know your not bullshitting me line. The answer of course is you don't know. For all I know you could be a fat bald indian in prison with his dick in his hand right now, or visa-versa. Actually from now on I would prefer you imagine me as that and that the image haunts you in your dreams.
Re: a comment on i dream in nine minute increments by ay deee	22-Nov-05/2:02 PM
No, he kept count by the song the little girls sang in the background. "One, two, Freddy's coming for you. Three, four, better lock the door..."
Re: a comment on Due Consideration by Dovina	22-Nov-05/1:56 PM
No I really think this does for timid poets what the Heimlich maneuver did for choke victims.
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	22-Nov-05/7:53 AM
Yep. But they were all perfect in their own way. One I almost married. Wanna go 2 for 2.
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	22-Nov-05/7:36 AM
My last three girlfriends: 19 - 33 - 41 Guess which one was the most perfect in bed.
Re: One Second by TLRufener	22-Nov-05/6:14 AM
Sounds like Eminem for some reason. Maybe I read it too fast.
Re: a comment on leah by T. Jonathron Remp	22-Nov-05/6:00 AM
Just kiddin' TJR.
Re: a comment on leah by T. Jonathron Remp	22-Nov-05/5:54 AM
Sarcasm is one of the simplest forms of comedy and is most often used by clueless highschool kids who lack the imagination or skill to say anything wittier than the exact opposite of what they are thinking. With that said I'll make my leave and allow you two lovebirds go back to your makeout session. TJR, if your poetry were as well thought out as this comment of yours than you would never hear a negetive word from me. Really.