on some deleted poem
31 Aug 2005, 10:07 AM
Weee! Look at me. I'm the new guy (well sorta new). Can I join your gang. Huh, huh, can I, can I? You all seem like the coolest...
Oh shoot was I suppose to make a comment related to the poem? Oh well.
So whats up...
Oh shoot was I suppose to make a comment related to the poem? Oh well.
So whats up...
on The Innocence of a Child by Tainted Butterfly
11 Sep 2005, 6:34 PM
The simplicity, sweetness and flow of this poem actually works for the subject. Good ear but try approaching subjects from unexpected angles.
on some deleted poem
11 Sep 2005, 6:54 PM
I don't like the look of numbering such short stanzas.
Good title.
Good title.
on some deleted poem
11 Sep 2005, 6:54 PM
I don't like the look of numbering such short stanzas.
Good title.
Good title.
on some deleted poem
11 Sep 2005, 8:44 PM
Weird science.
on My Big Butt by Dovina
11 Sep 2005, 3:59 PM
"36-24-36
Only if she's 5'3"
A full booty is beautiful.
Only if she's 5'3"
A full booty is beautiful.
on some deleted poem
11 Sep 2005, 6:58 PM
Reads like punk rock.
I was really hoping I'd click on the title and only a blank page would come up. That would have got a 10 from me.
I was really hoping I'd click on the title and only a blank page would come up. That would have got a 10 from me.
on some deleted poem
11 Sep 2005, 7:12 PM
Also ironic: if I hadn't came in your mum I would have never had the opportunity to read this poem.
on some deleted poem
11 Sep 2005, 7:13 PM
Good twist on the Yo Mama dis.
on Moving Out by jessicazee
11 Sep 2005, 7:21 PM
I'll give you an 8 because you can spell vacuum which is more than at least two other poets can do.
on Be Free Ye by D. $ Fontera
11 Sep 2005, 7:35 PM
If Dr. Suess wrote a minstrel version of a Shakespearean play during a coke binge.
on some deleted poem
11 Sep 2005, 4:43 PM
A bit repetitious. That may be a reflection of your life. Try mixing your drinks up a little.
on My addict by Heather Dee
11 Sep 2005, 4:46 PM
Courtney Love! Is that you?
on some deleted poem
12 Sep 2005, 3:25 PM
10
on Tall Windows by tianyi
12 Sep 2005, 3:28 PM
Nice snapshot.
on some deleted poem
11 Sep 2005, 8:32 PM
Meter needs work in the middle lines.
Line 2 contradicts line 1.
Has potential.
Line 2 contradicts line 1.
Has potential.
on to all of you by Heather Dee
13 Sep 2005, 2:37 AM
Consider yourself lucky if you get constructive remarks. Alot of people here just want to make fun of others.
Start with free-verse it's easier to pull off.
Read some of the masters.
Find those poems that speak to you and study them and there authors to death.
Use cheats like dictionaries, thesauruses and rhymezone.com.
Then decide you don't give a fuck what the assholes think and write on.
Start with free-verse it's easier to pull off.
Read some of the masters.
Find those poems that speak to you and study them and there authors to death.
Use cheats like dictionaries, thesauruses and rhymezone.com.
Then decide you don't give a fuck what the assholes think and write on.
Nevermind.