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31-Aug-05/10:07 AM |
Weee! Look at me. I'm the new guy (well sorta new). Can I join your gang. Huh, huh, can I, can I? You all seem like the coolest...
Oh shoot was I suppose to make a comment related to the poem? Oh well.
So whats up...
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| Re: Intrusion by Sasha |
31-Aug-05/10:16 AM |
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For using the sentence "Wrapped tight as a huge boa round his wood" without refering to a penis I give you -10-
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| Re: Comment Ranker (Favorites) by MacFrantic |
31-Aug-05/10:20 AM |
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| Re: My Big Butt by Dovina |
11-Sep-05/3:59 PM |
"36-24-36
Only if she's 5'3"
A full booty is beautiful.
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11-Sep-05/4:43 PM |
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A bit repetitious. That may be a reflection of your life. Try mixing your drinks up a little.
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| Re: My addict by Heather Dee |
11-Sep-05/4:46 PM |
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Courtney Love! Is that you?
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| Re: The Thief by Niphredil |
11-Sep-05/5:11 PM |
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Good subject. Timings good. You don't reveal the outcome too soon.
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| Re: The Innocence of a Child by Tainted Butterfly |
11-Sep-05/6:34 PM |
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The simplicity, sweetness and flow of this poem actually works for the subject. Good ear but try approaching subjects from unexpected angles.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
11-Sep-05/6:54 PM |
I don't like the look of numbering such short stanzas.
Good title.
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11-Sep-05/6:54 PM |
I don't like the look of numbering such short stanzas.
Good title.
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11-Sep-05/6:58 PM |
Reads like punk rock.
I was really hoping I'd click on the title and only a blank page would come up. That would have got a 10 from me.
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11-Sep-05/7:12 PM |
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Also ironic: if I hadn't came in your mum I would have never had the opportunity to read this poem.
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11-Sep-05/7:13 PM |
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Good twist on the Yo Mama dis.
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| Re: Moving Out by jessicazee |
11-Sep-05/7:21 PM |
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I'll give you an 8 because you can spell vacuum which is more than at least two other poets can do.
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| Re: Be Free Ye by D. $ Fontera |
11-Sep-05/7:35 PM |
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If Dr. Suess wrote a minstrel version of a Shakespearean play during a coke binge.
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11-Sep-05/8:32 PM |
Meter needs work in the middle lines.
Line 2 contradicts line 1.
Has potential.
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11-Sep-05/8:44 PM |
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12-Sep-05/3:25 PM |
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| Re: Tall Windows by tianyi |
12-Sep-05/3:28 PM |
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| Re: to all of you by Heather Dee |
13-Sep-05/2:37 AM |
Consider yourself lucky if you get constructive remarks. Alot of people here just want to make fun of others.
Start with free-verse it's easier to pull off.
Read some of the masters.
Find those poems that speak to you and study them and there authors to death.
Use cheats like dictionaries, thesauruses and rhymezone.com.
Then decide you don't give a fuck what the assholes think and write on.
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