Re: Black Clouds by Haleyj	19-Mar-05/1:08 PM
"Basking beneath All of the darkened stars" Comment: I like that! It has opposites in it. Good word use, I think. "I’ll build myself up Don’t rely on anyone Because people can change And secrets can be undone" Comment: I like the sound and truth in that rhyming. I think this is a good introspective poem - juli :)
Re: The Sidekick Retires From Fairview's Finest by luzrheroguy	19-Mar-05/7:03 PM
I really like the first verse a lot. It's smooth and clear: "My best was never enough Against you at your worst I'm always a close second Compared to your first" I like how it rhymes just here and there without sounding fake or funky. It sounds like it just flowed out that way.
Re: pihsdneirf ruo fo dne eht(The Burn) by thepinkbunnyofdoom	19-Mar-05/7:10 PM
I can tell you are a pretty intelligent person, maybe above average, and very articulate...I like this poem. I wrote one about being "burned" once....one of the phrases was .....new skin under the burns...... This poem brought it to mind. That's all I can remember of my "burned" poem. I was pretty crazy over that guy. I've forgotten all about him now, oh...and the poem was thrown away with the memory. That's all I could retrieve from that dusty part of my memory. Good stuff, pinkbunny-guy. I'll read some more of yours.
Re: pihsdneirf ruo fo dne eht(The Burn) by thepinkbunnyofdoom	19-Mar-05/7:11 PM
oooops. I forgot to vote
Re: Sophia, Lets get this over with by thepinkbunnyofdoom	19-Mar-05/7:35 PM
"Come, lets dance, with flames and silhouettes" I REALLY like that imagery. In fact, your whole poem was like I was right there. I was right. You ARE very articulate...and very intelligent. Poetry pretty much tells on a person, who they are and all that. A very good piece.
Re: Children in the Storm by thepinkbunnyofdoom	19-Mar-05/7:38 PM
ANOTHER good one.
Re: Youth by thepinkbunnyofdoom	19-Mar-05/7:45 PM
awesome. Good grief, man! This is really good stuff.
Re: A Second by Luzr	27-Mar-05/8:27 PM
Well, pink bunny/luzr, Another REALLY good poem, very real, too, like you are writing in your journal or writing a letter to someone about this girl. Just a few comments: ***The words I haven't even wrote yet ***Burning brightly on my tongue VERY good imagery! This alone made me want to keep on reading. ***And then I'll spend the rest of my evening ***Dancing a tactful tip-toe ***Between polite, and real conversation ***Remembering that words are weapons ***And you never liked the smoking barrel of my tongue ***So I'll have to try and keep it unloaded This really struck me. You are so open and well articulated that I can actually "see" how you and this girl are (or were), what your relationship is like. You tend to be hard, but you are tender with this girl. ***A second first, The only part that I dind't "get" was the "a second first". What does that part mean? Overall, VERY nicely done. juli harrelson :)
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Mar-05/12:03 PM
Dovina/Pinkbunny: Thank you so much for being truthful. I know you guys are telling the truth because I just cannot seem to find my "old passion" and how open and raw I used to be at one time when I wrote poetry and prose. My journal is the ONLY place I get REALLY real and passionate. But thank you, again, for being real with me. I know this poem is missing something. Just gotta find my old self. Sincerely, juli :)
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Mar-05/12:16 PM
Now, THAT is one HECK of a passionate poem! I think you pulled off the rhyming really well. ***Window slamming, ***Many looks, ***Paper jamming, This was the only part that through me slightly off. Is the setting for this poem an office? Sorry, if not. That's what came to mind as I read it. Very good.