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Black Clouds (Free verse) by Haleyj
These black clouds arenât moving
Theyâre just pouring the rain
Iâm soaked in my misery
And every inch of the pain
Sometimes I walk alone
Trying to wash away
The sins that Iâve done
Theyâll never go away
I drench myself
From head to toe
Trying to wash away, misery
I walk for hours
Staring at the all the passing cars
Basking beneath
All of the darkened stars
Smiles are just masks
Who hide who we really are
And I wear that disguise
To hide who I really am
Youâll never get to me
The pearl in the clam
Youâll have to break me
To find me
When youâre done with me
You throw me back in the sea
There Iâll drown
Just like I am now
Broken, miserable, and despaired
Making myself a new vow
Iâll build myself up
Donât rely on anyone
Because people can change
And secrets can be undone
Greediness is a common curse
Its almost every where you go
And as I walk in the rain I notice this
Because it fills me from head to toe
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Posted: March 19, 2005 9:09 AM PST; Last modified: March 19, 2005 9:09 AM PST
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All of the darkened stars"
Comment: I like that! It has opposites in it. Good word use, I think.
"Iâll build myself up
Donât rely on anyone
Because people can change
And secrets can be undone"
Comment: I like the sound and truth in that rhyming.
I think this is a good introspective poem
- juli :)