regarding some deleted poem...	14-Nov-02/11:52 AM
Unless you want vicious perverts of my sort to mock you into an early grave, spell 'ahead' correctly in the last line.
Re: Ode to the unwanted chip by deadstar	14-Nov-02/11:54 AM
No insulting McCain! He lived a bare hour's away from here and is one of the prides of the province, by Gad. By the way, this isn't TO the chip. It's BY the chip. Change the title to 'The Unwanted Chip's Ode' or something like that.
Re: The Wooden Armchair Of Similar Dreams by Caducus	14-Nov-02/11:55 AM
I can't help it. Generally, when I see the word 'Crocodile' in a poem, I expect to be amused. You actually managed to use them well. Bravo.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Nov-02/11:58 AM
Ah. Much much better. Except the end, I rather liked the lines breaks at 'Wait.../It was not etc'. And I'd liek it better either if you put 'of every dagger' on a separate line or got rid of the trees. But still, far better. The replacement of the 'Fuck' with the 'goodnight kiss' is good.
Re: love song by <~>	25-Nov-02/7:24 PM
What idiot thought this was a cello? Gah.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Nov-02/6:11 AM
Please tell me the shocks are all sarcastic.
Re: Lifted from a song- gang bang by UAFANTHORPEY	27-Nov-02/6:20 AM
What's the song, 'On top of Old Smokey'?
Re: Sent from Above by Sugarbbybuttrfly	29-Nov-02/7:20 PM
Wow, avoided to actually use the word 'angel'. You get a point for that.
Re: Once upon a Christmas Eve by exoticwriter	29-Nov-02/7:23 PM
It would be funnier if it happened on Halloween. And isn't pride the gravest of the Seven Deadlies? Are you advocating SIN? Get away from me! Drop on your knees and PRAY, you terrible, terrible thing!
Re: The Slanty Shanty by Quarton	1-Dec-02/10:57 AM
Slighty too long.
Re: European Pentameter by bondjedi	1-Dec-02/10:58 AM
The last line is brilliant.
Re: Kisses by debbitha	2-Dec-02/12:23 PM
This is beyond stealing. Shelley wrote that 200 years ago. And you didn't even mangle it properly.
Re: hate by ts	2-Dec-02/7:15 PM
Dear God. Please, please, PLEASE tell me the spelling mistakes were on purpose. PLEASE.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Dec-02/5:56 PM
Meraviglioso, la musica de le tue parole al fine.
Re: Europeans shouldn't mess with Ronald McDonald because one day he will rule their pathetic "continent" by bondjedi	11-Dec-02/6:08 PM
Snails are interesting. One should try them at least once in one's life. But I confess one couldn't take too much at a time. Sort of like snake.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Dec-02/7:13 PM
Hmmm... how many times did I comment on the original fifteen versions of this again? It's much clearer than some of the drafts, but I think it might have lost some of its punch, especially in the last two stanzas. I still think that the 'Wait/It was not as bad' part worked better when it was broken in three or four lines. Still, it's good.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Dec-02/7:15 PM
Bravo. You know the works well.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Dec-02/9:10 PM
Brava, signorina, brava. Perdona le mio atroce Italiano, te pregha, non so perche io le parla, mah bah. Though I might mentio nthat 'sapphire' has two 'p's, just because I'm a pedant.
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Dec-02/6:16 PM
I truly, truly, truly hope that legions of dead alchemists haunt at night. You deserve that and more.
Re: Why? by Bazilla	31-Dec-02/10:08 PM
The devil may know, the devil may care, and the devil may damn you straight to hell. And I most certainly hope he will. Sinatra is dead because he was old. And a smarmy crooner who stole songs. And very, very boring.