| Re: a comment on Fall from Love's Grace by loneshadow29 |
1-Oct-02/1:47 PM |
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or another way is that I can't or I'm not permitted to see the that something others see in me... or maybe I refuse to see it because I know myself better than anyone else... I don't always look down, but then again, I hardly look up...
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| Re: a comment on Fall from Love's Grace by loneshadow29 |
1-Oct-02/1:23 PM |
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Thank you so much god'swife... it looks a lot better than it did once before...
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| Re: a comment on Fall from Love's Grace by loneshadow29 |
1-Oct-02/1:14 PM |
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sure... but I tried to access your email... if you want, mail me at my email... apparently I need all the help I can get...
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| Re: a comment on Fall from Love's Grace by loneshadow29 |
1-Oct-02/1:12 PM |
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I thought it was great... :o)
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| Re: a comment on Fall from Love's Grace by loneshadow29 |
1-Oct-02/1:01 PM |
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come on p&k, give me a break will ya? I'm trying to get this right... at least god'swife and intransit have been kind enough to try to help me
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| Re: a comment on Fall from Love's Grace by loneshadow29 |
1-Oct-02/12:06 PM |
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I understand you completely... I took what I could, every moment I remember clearly... I tried my best to capture... I hope I captured everything the way it was... exactly how it was :o) But it sounds like it may be too much... does it to you?
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| Re: a comment on Fall from Love's Grace by loneshadow29 |
1-Oct-02/11:32 AM |
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I will try my best... but it's hard to... something still remains inside... something I've tried to let die but would not, it cannot... but if the pain will make this into something... then I guess I must...
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| Re: a comment on Fall from Love's Grace by loneshadow29 |
1-Oct-02/11:05 AM |
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does it sound any better than before? God, I hope so :o)
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| Re: a comment on Fall from Love's Grace by loneshadow29 |
1-Oct-02/10:26 AM |
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Thanks God'swife... I guess back to the drawing board... I'm gonna try to make at least one poem worth a damn...
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| Re: a comment on Life of a Cubicle Dweller by loneshadow29 |
1-Oct-02/9:15 AM |
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I'll see what I can add on to it... I think I might have a few little ideas that could give it a little more... thanks for the suggestion! :o)
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| Re: Winter Rose by Brennan |
1-Oct-02/7:21 AM |
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great poem brennan... I felt the emotion with each line 10 for ya :o)
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| Re: Melancholia by vulcan |
30-Sep-02/11:41 AM |
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| Re: a comment on The Writing Life #2 by poetandknowit |
28-Sep-02/8:52 AM |
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I agree with you... he is the exact same way to me as well... you should post on piptalk.com... they're really nice and they'll help out if you need. But, I think he enjoys bashing works so he will feel better about his own... oh and p&k, if you're reading this... not the best poem in the world bud..
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| Re: a comment on My Gift to You by loneshadow29 |
23-Sep-02/9:18 AM |
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Thanks for the comment... to be honest, this is one of the few poems that I am truly proud of... :o)
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| Re: a comment on Wedding Day... by loneshadow29 |
23-Sep-02/9:15 AM |
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well... the poem is about a depressed man watching the happiness of his friend's wedding. I was glad that she had found someone and that she was happy. She moved away and when I heard she came to visit... I decided to write this for her... because I wanted her to know that I was happy for her and I still am. Just thought I'd give you the story...
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| Re: a comment on Torn... by loneshadow29 |
19-Sep-02/1:04 PM |
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thanks for the comment... burdensome beast doest sound a bit better and thank god that burden has long since been shed. :o)
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| Re: In the Light by nocturnalism |
19-Sep-02/8:59 AM |
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such a dark feeling... to have your personal demons destroying every bit of your being... I relived the pain I went through but i promise, the pain will pass. great poem :o)
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| Re: a comment on Torn... by loneshadow29 |
17-Sep-02/1:24 PM |
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I'm sorry you felt my poem deserved such low marks... Just to let you know that I have worked to find my salvation and I've achieved it... and I really don't care if the universe doesn't care about me... because I know the people who do... I wrote how I felt... end of story... I don't mind criticism but to be rude is another story...
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| Re: lovely by pink_punk_kisses87 |
17-Sep-02/9:43 AM |
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wow... I slowly read the poem, gaining the picture in my mind... first I thought you watched him while he slept but then I was thrown at the end... it's a good poem :o) And furthermore, I apologize for the childish responses I read after this poem... you're a good poet and I look forward to more of your work :o)
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| Re: America the Beautiful? by pink_punk_kisses87 |
17-Sep-02/9:35 AM |
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I can understand where you're coming from... this is a great country but the ideals which make it great have been distorted... a nation of peace yet so much hatred fills the air, so much pain... government bound to help the people, but more worried about themselves... so much anger envisioned of the problems we face today... let me be the first since no one who commented had the guts to say, without the sarcasm... good poem Pink Punk Kisses
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