Re: a comment on Maybe I Wasn’t Born on a Fool’s Day by Dovina	14-Apr-06/10:29 AM
I'm too old for it to be prophecy. Invented story? - maybe. Karma - hardly.
Re: Sails of Sorrow by D. $ Fontera	13-Apr-06/4:06 PM
"I" in the chorus is the sun, but "I" in the verses is apparently the narrator. Does the sun curse the sea, or does the narrator? A good start, and could be a good poem
Re: Embrace by MacFrantic	13-Apr-06/3:58 PM
The grammar is off in the last two lines. I think it says that all you know is love. Okay, but that's not saying much.
Re: a comment on metadata by digipoet	13-Apr-06/2:57 PM
Or this, my favorite, but not mine. It captures the profundity of successful jumps from airplanes and other places. First time skydiving Chute works great! But below me, A helicopter.
Re: a comment on metadata by digipoet	13-Apr-06/2:26 PM
Of all Pokémon, big and small, Pikachu, you rule them all, you do.
Re: A Living Word by MacFrantic	13-Apr-06/9:36 AM
It starts out crisp an cutting, as it should. The second verse drifts from that focused beginning, and the third more so. I really like the first verse.
Re: metadata by digipoet	13-Apr-06/9:30 AM
"last_modified: 01/01/00"? Nothing happened in six years? You could call this "programming"
Re: jay by ecargo	13-Apr-06/9:27 AM
They are audacious!
Re: Face of Iran by Caducus	13-Apr-06/9:25 AM
Why "dust"? Maybe "amps" or "watts"
Re: Behind the storm clouds, the moon consoles the sun.(edited) by ALChemy	12-Apr-06/5:27 PM
I'm trying to ignore all that's been said and read it as if new. I'm trying to see the moon in the morning, consoling the sun, and forgetting about your neice. If the moon is in the east in the morning, I think it has to be a thin crescent. Maybe it can console the sun no matter where it is in the sky, or even if it has set. It holds the sun even at night, so I guess proximity is not the point. I'm trying now to see the sun riding on the moon's shoulders, and them playing together in the rain. Again an eclipse comes to mind, but you mean it symbolically, I'm sure. Without further input, I would take it as whimsey or pure fascination with nature.
Re: a comment on Genesis by Dovina	12-Apr-06/5:12 PM
Yes, I had a different kind of battle in mind.
Re: a comment on Genesis by Dovina	12-Apr-06/4:49 PM
I was thinking the same thing about your resilience during the Fort Bragg battle.
Re: a comment on Genesis by Dovina	12-Apr-06/4:28 PM
Of course, you are facetious in saying that we should base a religion on it. Or that we should base a religion on any text about a god who “has tried very hard to leave no evidence of his existence.” Perhaps you have read the long discussion on this topic following my recent poem “The Battle of Fort Bragg.” While that argument got sidetracked on personal feelings and insinuations, I think your comment brings us to the crucial issue: What is the evidence for God’s existence? God has craftily kept that to Himself, I’m afraid. Or at least He has made it so obscure as to elude impartial observation. It is possible that evidence exists for God's existence, but as yet we don’t know it. Some people claim the miracles as evidence, but I find most of them unverified. Still, I would try not to be hostile to future proofs for God's existence and thereby less objective about attempted proofs. Having no proof for God, we have little with which to even describe Him. But whether or not something exists does not depend on whether or not it can be described. If something exists, it exists independently of our ability to describe it. Things exist whether or not someone knows they exists, let alone accurately describes them. Religious belief can be thought of as circular: Because we long for God, such longing must imply the existence of a deity. One might as well say that because we long for immortality, immortality must be possible. As long as humans cannot bear to contemplate their own extinction, there will always be another Baal, and atheism will always be a minority stance. I respect the atheist position, since my own is based on no more evidence.
Re: a comment on Genesis by Dovina	12-Apr-06/12:06 PM
I don’t think it matters very much what anyone thinks God is like. Whatever He is like, we are stuck with Him. Here, I’ve written a scenario with some evidence in its favor. It’s speculation, of course, but something to think about.
Re: a comment on Genesis by Dovina	12-Apr-06/12:06 PM
Today is the seventh day since I posted the Battle of Fort Bragg. On the seventh day God rested, and you, created in His image, may rest too.
Re: a time of dynamics by Dental Panic	11-Apr-06/6:02 PM
Since you are using punctuation, it's best to use it throughout. Comma after chrome, for one example. It sounds like quite a trip, beginning with the needle of light or the poison berries - hard to say which.
Re: Genesis by Dovina	11-Apr-06/5:55 PM
Imagine it in the form of an old King James Bible – lines justified, serif font, huge “I” at the beginning – and read by a cantor in sanctimonious voice.
Re: a comment on The Battle of Fort Bragg by Dovina	11-Apr-06/4:55 PM
May the whole thing rest in peace. Dust to dust. Amen.
Re: a comment on The Battle of Fort Bragg by Dovina	11-Apr-06/4:02 PM
I get the impression that you are not thrilled with the outcome of this whole discussion about God. It has seen repeatition of the same ideas over and over with little in the way of resolution. I can say in its favor that the parties are still on speaking terms, and maybe each has clarified in his/her mind the ideas that he/she came with. That makes it more productive than most arguments about the existence of God. Usually, it ends in blood and/or tears, and everybody goes away hating each other. The logicians may call me silly if they want. I believe my position is as logical as theirs. They did come down heavy handedly in this discussion, and did so with what seemed to me as mostly rewordings of the same arguments. But I think that ecargo, at least, shows a little more openness. So, no flood today.
Re: a comment on The Battle of Fort Bragg by Dovina	11-Apr-06/3:38 PM
I am god of a vast universe of comments, you say. It is my property because I created the cell from which it all evolved. I can look upon my creation as God did in the time of Noah, carry off what I think is good, and bring a flood to destroy the rest. Or I can let it ride, as God appears to have done for the last few thousand years. But, like God, I began this menagerie for my pleasure, and I still have faith in that possibility. In spite of the nonsense and backbiting here in my little kingdom, I still choose to let it ride. Funny, you should mention it in this way. This evening, when the clock sounds, I plan to post something along these very lines.