Re: The Better Beggar by PodPoet	12-Mar-05/11:07 AM
It's a good point, but I think you carry on too much. Three or four verses could say it better. And trying to maintain rhyme and beat have weakened most of the verses.
Re: Your New Apartment by jessicazee	12-Mar-05/11:01 AM
Punctuation would help to clarify, especially using prose poem form. As it stands, I had to keep going back.
Re: Enchanted Place by Beyond_Dreams	12-Mar-05/10:55 AM
You have some good wording here, but I don't know the subject. An art-based poem like this might come through nicely if I were looking at the artwork. I suggest in writing such a poem that you provide a link to the art.
Re: How to make a suicide bomber by Caducus	12-Mar-05/10:49 AM
A commentary on American policy in Iraq, and a good one. Some repetative lines, probably written in angst - "spat on your brothers" and "Killed my brothers" - "told you how to live,who to worship" and "criticized my God."
Re: a comment on How to make a suicide bomber by Caducus	12-Mar-05/10:43 AM
Most of us would say "comprehension" in our ineptness. It's his gift to us to correct oiur grammar.
Re: a comment on Apostrophetic Loss by Dovina	12-Mar-05/6:59 AM
Opinionated spillage. So what?
Re: a comment on Apostrophetic Loss by Dovina	10-Mar-05/3:37 PM
I’m sorry you detected anger here. I wrote it with a touch of sarcasm to be sure, but in a jesting mood. Yes, some of the in-crowd conformities here on poemranker seem silly and need a jab occasionally, but nobody in her right mind expects to change anything, so anger is senseless. I’m also sorry you found it dull, dull, dull, or maybe you meant the “in-crowd rules” not the poem. In any case it got some attention, and that’s more than I can say for “The Hawk.”
Re: a comment on Moses by Dovina	10-Mar-05/3:26 PM
Nice to learn somebody actully reads some of these old poems. Thanks.
Re: a comment on Apostrophetic Loss by Dovina	10-Mar-05/12:28 PM
lol. And "sharpening" others.
Re: a comment on Apostrophetic Loss by Dovina	10-Mar-05/12:21 PM
No, but I just checked it on Google - looks interesting. Ive probably reinvented a lumpy wheel.
Re: a comment on Poet, Earth mover by INTRANSIT	10-Mar-05/12:14 PM
Go with coinage. (Poemranker rule 3675876.890 rev. 5789)
Re: a comment on Apostrophetic Loss by Dovina	10-Mar-05/12:12 PM
Eats shoots' leaves? Whatever for?
Re: To those that would teach poetry by INTRANSIT	10-Mar-05/12:09 PM
Why didn't you cahnge "it's" to "its" on this edit? It's been pointed out before. "forge you a sword" - don't get the connection. Otherwise good.
Re: A Dance by D. $ Fontera	10-Mar-05/12:01 PM
Seems silly. What on earth do you mean?
Re: Evening by Enkidu	10-Mar-05/11:59 AM
"life's" seems unneeded, and "nightly" seems not often enough for most catastrophes.
Re: a comment on Poet, Earth mover by INTRANSIT	10-Mar-05/8:01 AM
You'd do better to just omit the word than yield to their "best" solution. Sure its corrcet, so what. You've traded their approval for what I thought was a better way of saying it.
Re: a comment on Hunger 2 by Dovina	9-Mar-05/7:07 AM
An example of the objective, serious and helpful criticism you've so often claimed.
Re: a comment on Beetwen by Dovina	9-Mar-05/7:00 AM
That's low. Even lower than your usual name calling.
Re: a comment on Beetwen by Dovina	9-Mar-05/6:57 AM
Even you were able to read this. It's even easier than I thought. Of course, you want me to spell out every detail of the process for you.
Re: a comment on Poet, Earth mover by INTRANSIT	9-Mar-05/6:48 AM
Portly is obviously not what he meant! Notice that obviously is from an noun/adjective. And, yes, portent can be an adjective, as if it makes a diddly difference.