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Enchanted Place (Free verse) by Beyond_Dreams
Outlined in aster , and traced with trees The American painted lady weeps by the creek. Lepidoptera just sits there smelling the sweet aroma of lavender and cosmos. While off in the distance The dandelion stands alone. Never touched, outcast from beauty a weed among the trophies. No need for sorcery in this white mirth of careless laughter, For the song of the gray crested tufted titmouse utters a love song; Listening to the water splash a thousand leagues away. Crickets dance to the twinkle of the smiling stars immemorial to the silver-veiled moon, a dusting of the obscenely clouds harboring the Milky-Ways shroud of perfection, from dawn till' now.

Up the ladder: guilt
Down the ladder: THINK ABOUT ME

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Weighted score: 4.9602656
Overall Rank: 8582
Posted: March 12, 2005 8:00 AM PST; Last modified: March 12, 2005 8:00 AM PST
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[7] Dovina @ 12.72.13.229 | 12-Mar-05/10:55 AM | Reply
You have some good wording here, but I don't know the subject. An art-based poem like this might come through nicely if I were looking at the artwork. I suggest in writing such a poem that you provide a link to the art.
[n/a] Beyond_Dreams @ 71.98.1.126 > Dovina | 12-Mar-05/11:00 AM | Reply
I would provide a link but I can't give you a link to my pictures I create in my mind. I can tell you what I was thinking about when I wrote this poem. A butterfly garden with a stream running through the center. Filled with the obviouse. Sitting on a bench just drawing nature around you untill night fall.
[7] Dovina @ 12.72.13.229 > Beyond_Dreams | 12-Mar-05/11:16 AM | Reply
You fooled me then.
[7] zodiac @ 212.118.11.13 | 12-Mar-05/11:22 PM | Reply
Your a regular Sam Coleridge, aren't you?
[n/a] Beyond_Dreams @ 71.98.1.126 > zodiac | 13-Mar-05/5:54 AM | Reply
arn't we just the comedian
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 82.39.21.223 > Beyond_Dreams | 13-Mar-05/6:36 AM | Reply
Your a dim
[7] Dovina @ 12.72.12.111 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 13-Mar-05/6:41 AM | Reply
zodiac is the dim, you dim. You've misplaced your comment again, distracted no doubt by the pretty pink sheathes.
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