Re: a comment on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	21-Apr-05/6:32 AM
The thing did not load right and I'm not about to change a bunch of settings to make it work.
Re: Staying Alive by darylchew	20-Apr-05/3:57 PM
Some grammar problems. Suicide poems usually don't work.
Re: A new leaf by Damien	20-Apr-05/3:53 PM
"their" in Line 6. "boundless" in Line 13 "whoever" in Line 16 I hope you do not mean that you hope this is not understandable. If you do mean that, why did you write it? The first two verses make sense to me, the last two - I don't know.
Re: tanka (3) by shadows	20-Apr-05/3:45 PM
Yes, you are.
Re: a comment on Reincarnation by Dovina	20-Apr-05/8:05 AM
At age 78, the new pope can't last long. I think it's a giving-in to old dogma just long enough to gain the support needed for a pope with sense. Declining mass attendance, in Ireland for example, should help to this end.
Re: Baggage (3rd ending) by INTRANSIT	20-Apr-05/7:58 AM
I like the crosses: genes/jeans, baggage/DNA. Think it would sound less didactic and more homely if you replaced all the "we"'s with "I" or Jonney or the new pope, zodiac, whatever.
Re: a comment on Sudden Change by Dovina	20-Apr-05/7:52 AM
Get some rest, or head for Damascus, get a load of Christians, haul them to Rome, or well, try to.
Re: a comment on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	20-Apr-05/5:38 AM
2) I have a lot of experience with blacks and my ways of talking about them are more appropriate than yours because I understand them better.
Re: Sins of a Father by Mona Lisa	19-Apr-05/1:52 PM
Why not use punctuation within the lines, since you're using it at the ends? I like "coughed a bastard" and "coughed at amen." But much of this eludes me.
Re: a comment on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	19-Apr-05/1:36 PM
2) Oh, I see. I am supposed to bow down to your comments because you say your are more educated than I am. 6) That's a stupid suggestion because the poem is about what I want it to be about, not what you want it to be about.
Re: a comment on Reincarnation by Dovina	19-Apr-05/9:09 AM
Of course, I find no inane or wrong comments in my repitoir, except for a few that were intended as funny. I would appreciate a few examples.
Re: a comment on Reincarnation by Dovina	19-Apr-05/6:19 AM
I will assume tentatively that you mean "Oh, good answer" sincerely. I am content in my menial existance, but find Dovina exciting in the way fantasy is.
Re: a comment on Reincarnation by Dovina	19-Apr-05/6:17 AM
It's the trouble with all religion. answers are too easy.
Re: a comment on Reincarnation by Dovina	19-Apr-05/6:16 AM
The third stanza relates reincarnation to heaven and ghosts in that it projects life past death, and maybe before birth. I thought it was in interesting comparison, though admitedly not developed in the poem.
Re: We Were Burnouts by jessicazee	17-Apr-05/9:45 AM
Some spelling mistakes in the last few lines.
Re: a comment on Reincarnation by Dovina	17-Apr-05/9:33 AM
I have a friend who believes he is the same soul who fought in the Crusades as one of the Knights Templar, and later was a Great Plains inhabitant around 1300. So I began to think who I might have been, and came up with Dovina. I have no memory of her and find no reason to believe my soul is hers, but reading about her I a felt an attachment. It’s a pleasant thought, that’s about all I can say.
Re: a comment on Reincarnation by Dovina	17-Apr-05/9:32 AM
I love to get jiggy.
Re: a comment on Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	17-Apr-05/9:25 AM
1)Their historical oppression is greater than my miniscule-by-comparison oppression. Their current oppression is not much different from mine in this particular case. 2) same answer. 3) I've said it from the beginneng, some of them do, and one one them did it to me. 4) What? 5) They don't make up for it in kind, but in much lesser kind. I'm sorry, zodiac, but ignoring, not hiring, belittling, and skipping just don't quite cover it. It's a joke to even suggest they do.
Re: Silent by storyspinner	16-Apr-05/1:28 PM
If I knew this was written by someone who could not speak, Id say it's sensual and meaningful to a reader who can. If I didn't know that I'd say the same.
Re: Thanks again by Everyone	16-Apr-05/11:26 AM
I'll take ten pounds not to tell.