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Staying Alive (Free verse) by darylchew
Slumping over his armchair, with crimson flowing like the sad tears of God from his wrists, All hail the stinging sharpness of this about-to-be murderer, as the poison spreads over the floor like a disease. His last thoughts was a nightmare, lust desire and temptation for two cold clammy strangers, Was it a twist of fate? Determined intentions forbid but falters, to the unintended outcome - He struggles for breath. Hurriedly passing him by, the winds of Time leaves him sitting on a throne Of shredded red ribbons.

Up the ladder: The Last Suburb

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.6666667
Weighted score: 4.8410625
Overall Rank: 10662
Posted: April 20, 2005 2:12 AM PDT; Last modified: April 20, 2005 2:12 AM PDT
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[5] Dovina @ 204.250.12.246 | 20-Apr-05/3:57 PM | Reply
Some grammar problems. Suicide poems usually don't work.
[n/a] darylchew @ 202.156.2.130 > Dovina | 21-Apr-05/12:59 AM | Reply
it's about aids.
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