| Re: a comment on Strength by Dovina |
8-Sep-05/11:56 AM |
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No, because she is a self-controlled person who holds her rage. I am not so self-controlled.
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| Re: Small-town Postal Clerk Considers Inspiration by zodiac |
6-Sep-05/6:22 AM |
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Some good lines, but as a story, it lacks continuity. The German thing comes too late.
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| Re: a comment on Strength by Dovina |
6-Sep-05/6:17 AM |
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It would necessetate raging if I felt as strongly about it as I think she does. Does that make it more understandable?
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| Re: a comment on Strength by Dovina |
6-Sep-05/6:16 AM |
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Yes, mam, right away. Thanks.
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| Re: a comment on First Love by Dovina |
6-Sep-05/6:14 AM |
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And after all that romping around. I must never have seen winnnnnter.
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| Re: a comment on First Love by Dovina |
6-Sep-05/6:13 AM |
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I see, and saw before you said the trite thing, your point.
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| Re: a comment on First Love by Dovina |
6-Sep-05/6:12 AM |
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The word "that" when used in a poem is distrsacting to me. I avoid it in favor of brevity, and at the expense of rhythm, most of the time. Meaning is better than rhythm, in my possibly obsolete opinion.
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| Re: Untitled by bellafuego |
4-Sep-05/2:44 PM |
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Try again when you're sober.
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| Re: a comment on Beware of Cruel Poets by Dovina |
4-Sep-05/2:43 PM |
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Do you know that, being a new user, or are you speculating?
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| Re: Powerless Dreamer by Beyond_Dreams |
4-Sep-05/11:33 AM |
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| Re: Lessons(revised) by bellafuego |
4-Sep-05/11:18 AM |
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2+2=4 no matter how many times you revise it. The last line, and all but the second, make sense.
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| Re: Dale by INTRANSIT |
3-Sep-05/9:55 AM |
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What's left? Black russians, that's what. Far super over White, in every way. I've never taught a man to play darts and then have him beat his father. Maybe you need another lesson.
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| Re: a comment on The Scout by wilco |
3-Sep-05/9:40 AM |
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I'm sitting at a bar where there's an internet computer sunk into the bar, with a wireless keyboard and mouse. The black russian is sweet under a hot Texasn sun. Subjected to such adversity, do you really expect me to see some cajun hurricane or the end of mankind. No, of course you don't. Mankind sit all around, all girlfriended or wived. And all you can complain about is a few thousand miserble flooded, crushed lives.
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| Re: a comment on The fight by INTRANSIT |
3-Sep-05/7:02 AM |
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If it's a naughtiness scale, you get 10.
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| Re: The Scout by wilco |
3-Sep-05/7:00 AM |
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"virgin canvas" has no picture, yet a tale unfolds. Also, "scout" as if searching ahead for some group of people - maybe another word. A way it could have gone, and might go.
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| Re: The fight by INTRANSIT |
3-Sep-05/6:55 AM |
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Very naughty! Go straight to your room!
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| Re: a comment on First Love by Dovina |
3-Sep-05/6:51 AM |
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The lady next to me did that in a charismatic meeting and hit me in the eye.
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| Re: a comment on First Love by Dovina |
3-Sep-05/6:45 AM |
Skip straightly around zodiac, if you want. Do you think he really didn't get it?
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| Re: a comment on First Love by Dovina |
3-Sep-05/6:41 AM |
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Is your point that "I wasnât winter-broken, though, I thought that it would stay." has a better beat than "I wasnât winter-broken, I thought it would stay."? Do you really mean that four beats is better than three? The prior lines don't carry a steady number of beats, why should the last two? Is rhythm really more important?
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| Re: a comment on First Love by Dovina |
3-Sep-05/6:34 AM |
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Do you really not see the point?
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