Re: The Bed I Made by BrandonW	4-Nov-05/11:19 AM
Seems the ? should be at the end of Verse 1. Good as a lyric, but I think a repeating chorus would be good, something like the last verse.
Re: The Old Boat by Damon Mower	4-Nov-05/11:14 AM
I like the inhaling estuary. The heron seems parenthetic; do I miss a connection?
Re: a comment on Steak and Satin by Dovina	4-Nov-05/11:08 AM
Wow, a comment on my poem. This can’t be Poemranker! This site is reserved for gut punches and shin kicks to the poet, the poem being there just for openers. Still, I see your wanting more body parts and less decoration. Most men do. It’s a girly kind of feeling I was trying for here, not really designed to be seductive to men. Still, a few men out there understand this sort of female sensuality with ourselves. And, no, they’re not all gay. As for the lefsa in your pants. I must first ask if your mother was preparing Norwegian Potato Lefsa in the kitchen while you were doing chin-ups on the counter.
Re: A Joining Of Souls (edit) by Caducus	3-Nov-05/5:13 PM
Knives remind - verse 2 I'd omit beautiful - last verse otherwise beautiful
Re: solving the world's problems through poetry by skaskowski	3-Nov-05/12:57 PM
Funny, and true to the title.
Re: a comment on Steak and Satin by Dovina	3-Nov-05/8:44 AM
I have two legs to stand on. You have none!
Re: a comment on Steak and Satin by Dovina	2-Nov-05/6:20 PM
Really, must I keep nagging? Will you never listen? It's something dignified and Christian. I'll give you one more chance, and if you're close, a Busch.
Re: a comment on Racism by Dovina	2-Nov-05/2:05 PM
Discrimination on the basis of race is naughty, in my opinion. Genetic makeup is a distinguishing feature of race and of other attributes of a human. Discrimination on the basis of genetics is naughty or not, depending on how it is used. It is sensible to discriminate on the basis of genetics in the case of a retard should not be allowed to fly a plane. (Btw, a spastic may be very intelligent, but lacks control of his muscles. He might fly a plane just fine if it could be controlled by voice commands.) But if you say that the genetics of a race, such as negro, are inferior, then that is racism. If you show some study where negroes were found "inferior" in some particualr attribute, then counter studies show caucasians inferior in particulars too. If you call this answer a dodge, you are right. I prefer to call it stepping out of a trap.
Re: a comment on Steak and Satin by Dovina	2-Nov-05/1:46 PM
yes it is. Now please comment on the poem, how you react to it, what you think it says, what you agree with or disagree with. And what do you have against voting?
Re: a comment on Steak and Satin by Dovina	2-Nov-05/11:12 AM
Nice streotype depiction. Sorry, I won't take the bait.
Re: a comment on The Queen Mums Teeth by scitz	2-Nov-05/9:51 AM
You noticed, I am sure, that all those Wanked versions of me are not really me. They are immitations of the one-and-only Dovina. Fame has its sacrifices. It's not that different from the transvestite issue we were discussing.
Re: a comment on Steak and Satin by Dovina	2-Nov-05/9:44 AM
Lol. Now give me a real, manly comment. And a vote, if that's not sacriligious.
Re: a comment on I don't rhyme enough, eh? by Niphredil	2-Nov-05/7:18 AM
I wouldn't do that, and I don't think it's a good analogy.
Re: a comment on The Queen Mums Teeth by scitz	2-Nov-05/7:14 AM
See her homepage. I don't get it either, some administrative charge we common folks don't get the scoop on.
Re: a comment on Racism by Dovina	2-Nov-05/7:11 AM
Your pattern is predictable. You change the subject, then without receiving comment on it, claim victory. 1) defining race and being racist are not related - absurd! 2) No I don't agree with that. 3) A definition of race is necessary for discussion about it - simple. 4) The white and black races are widely different, I will not retract that, and that is all I said. Besides it's not connected to the original subject.
Re: a comment on Steak and Satin by Dovina	2-Nov-05/7:04 AM
No, we think about racism too.
Re: a comment on Racism by Dovina	1-Nov-05/6:50 PM
I have never doubted that you are a racist. "Genetically poor" is an interesting term, possibly even true.
Re: a comment on I don't rhyme enough, eh? by Niphredil	1-Nov-05/3:21 PM
If I were black, yes, I would be flattered by whites imitating blacks, even if it's only a stereotype of blacks. Transvestites' trying to be like us, even if flawed, is appealing. Am I demented?
Re: a comment on Racism by Dovina	1-Nov-05/2:09 PM
Standard College Dictionary, Harcourt, Brace and World: Race: "One of the major zoological subdivisions of mankind, regarded as having a common origin and exhibiting a relatively constant set of genetically determined physical traits. On the basis of the more commonly used criteria such as pigmentation, hair form, epicanthic folds, facial and bodily proportions, mankind has been divided into primary stocks or races, each of which is regarded as including a varying number of ethnic groups. According to some, the primary stocks are the Caucasoid, the Mongoloid, and the Negroid. A number of groups, such as the Polynesian, are of doubtful classification."
Re: a comment on I don't rhyme enough, eh? by Niphredil	1-Nov-05/1:26 PM
I don't see how it could be unflattering to me, but certainly I don't want to be unflattered. His escape might have been from the harsh reality of manhood, a condition he felt trapped in.