Re: a comment on Racism by Dovina	14-Nov-05/3:22 PM
For any three of them, at least two will agree. So what?
Re: not to settle for less than almost obliteration by ay deee	14-Nov-05/12:45 PM
The last line seems anti-theme. Being consumed and pushing don't quite go together.
Re: Bread and blackthorns by Caducus	14-Nov-05/12:31 PM
A Right Brain cannot get this I know, but reading your poems quickens the synapses, releasing the fluids, like squeezing blood out of silicone. Never change your style, only grammar sometimes and maybe the occasional hint of logic.
Re: a comment on Racism by Dovina	14-Nov-05/11:39 AM
And to think zodiac insists you are not racist! At least we agree that race exists, that it represents real physical diversity, discussable as such. That’s more than the average pair of anthropologists can agree on these days.
Re: a comment on Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina	13-Nov-05/6:45 AM
I will agree to the rightness of one whom I generally accuse of placing rhythm above rightness.
Re: a comment on Headlines by Dovina	13-Nov-05/6:43 AM
That's the trouble with the medical industry. We will pay for remedies, but scant little for eliminatioin of disease. It goes against the profit of the industry.
Re: a comment on Headlines by Dovina	13-Nov-05/6:41 AM
That's WWI.
Re: a comment on The Hawk by Dovina	13-Nov-05/6:38 AM
Maybe so. I hoped the first three verses would stand as contrasts of old-time verses new-time. When I switch modes at “Then howl of tires sank” I think the off-putting time confusion enters.
Re: a comment on The Hawk by Dovina	13-Nov-05/6:37 AM
I’ve been trying to stop howling for years, but it keeps welling up uncontrollably. I see how "like pebbles, city deep" improves rhythm, and in this case I may follow you there, though it goes against gut desire for meaning. And my But in the ass end of this, yes that too should go, I think.
Re: a comment on Headlines by Dovina	12-Nov-05/12:47 PM
I don't see how it relates to pandemonium or pandemic.
Re: The Hawk by Dovina	11-Nov-05/4:20 PM
Lots of hits, but no comments, the first time around. A few changes, and another try.
Re: a comment on Posted Pelicans by Dovina	11-Nov-05/2:40 PM
Or better: ungainly beak, hard, uncomfortable, finds day’s end rest, thrust in bush-clad crevice, twixt wing and breast.
Re: a comment on Headlines by Dovina	11-Nov-05/12:29 PM
Yes, it’s a pathetic prophecy, and really, it’s one of the possible outcomes. The virus mutates so rapidly that even though billions of doses of vaccine might be ready, a new mutation could wipe out millions of people before a suitable vaccine comes online. But my purpose in writing this is not to play Prophet. It’s to look at the way people think about pandemic, like the flu that came during WWI and killed more people than the war did.
Re: a comment on Headlines by Dovina	10-Nov-05/8:33 PM
This isn't about blame. Even though I used the word five times in the poem, it's really about causes and importance.
Re: a comment on Headlines by Dovina	10-Nov-05/8:30 PM
Yes, and proudly, I hope. For you shall be blessed in suffering persecution in the name Truth.
Re: a comment on Headlines by Dovina	10-Nov-05/7:11 PM
You might want to receive comfort by printing this poem and using it for a bookmark. Then you can check each one off as it occurs. Unless, of course, you become one of the 20 million.
Re: a comment on Headlines by Dovina	10-Nov-05/7:05 PM
I am part of the media, and I know the future. Repent of those evil words or die!
Re: a comment on phases of futility... by Bhaskaryya	10-Nov-05/6:42 PM
'Seasoned' as a poetic twist of 'seasonal' does not work for me because 'seasoned' has an established meaning; also it would be 'seasonaled.' Actually, I know a woman who says she has only loved only one man, and he has never returned more than a hill returns to the wind.
Re: phases of futility... by Bhaskaryya	10-Nov-05/12:10 PM
To pursue such a woman throughout life seems unimaginagle to me. The first verse works well. In the second, 'rain' seems a poor metaphor for a seasoned mate, and with your explanation, 'rain' seems inadequate a parallel for a thwarted love. The last verse, where leaves are memories, works well.
Re: a comment on Steak and Satin by Dovina	10-Nov-05/6:42 AM
I see now that your passion will never subside. You will clutter each and every poem, mine or not, until I give in to you and answer why I said blacks are the most different from whites, or retract it. Well ok then. I now commit to doing that, but it will take some time which I don’t have now. Perhaps this will abate the onslaught.