Re: Or So They Say by avery	5-Dec-04/10:41 AM
Make the punctuation consistant and the last two lines moire forceful. Otherwise good.
Re: DEATH by celticskatermatt1	6-Dec-04/8:58 AM
Five misspelled words. The last line is preachy and better omitted.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Dec-04/9:00 AM
Economical, tight, well told story.
Re: Corner Shop, 5 Quinton Road by Caducus	6-Dec-04/9:16 AM
"damson" as a verb? Some unusual and interesting language, "aped by girning monkeys," "cantering blurs," which needs a comma, I think. "there tone" should be "their tones." Right? The last verse lacks the punctuation of the first two. Interesting!
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Dec-04/9:22 AM
sorry, I don't get it.
Re: The Soul by Bobjim	6-Dec-04/9:28 AM
Do not the "perverted thoughts, hurtful passions" originate in the "centre of the mind," the very place "incarcerated" that you want to protect from those things? That doesn't make sense.
Re: Dreams of Neverland: A Second Encounter by TLRufener	6-Dec-04/9:37 AM
Delightful.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Dec-04/12:17 PM
A new game in which you still play for keeps. How is that new?
Re: A Christmas Thought by keatsImnot	7-Dec-04/11:32 AM
"Oh lets rejoice that happy" ???
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Dec-04/1:42 PM
Your name affects your character, like a "Boy named Sue." And "clumsywords" is not helping yours. "Instantly you are regretful" could be "instantly you regret" with no loss of rhythm. And how do you express an unknown love? Several lines need a closer look for clumsy words. The rest of your poem is a rather good statement of a common female dilemma, clearly painted, and needing polish.
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Dec-04/5:26 PM
Why the ' after boxes? "bone wheel" is a stretch, isn't it? the last line reminds of my recent "The Rockets' Song" Thinking of the vererans. Maybe a period after boxes, then "Each wheel clicks . . ."
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Dec-04/10:27 AM
Answer: There's little difference. How does this deconstruct religion or even challenge it?
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Dec-04/4:27 PM
Do you really mean, “I would be once more the man in which you had fallen in love.”? If you like the ambiguity, change only “which” to “whom.” “Ready to take its place.”
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Dec-04/4:39 PM
'someone else could.' "porkpie hat"?
Re: Poet, Earth mover by INTRANSIT	9-Dec-04/4:56 PM
Quite good.
Re: Love by RION12	10-Dec-04/10:28 AM
Your usual Poemranker therapists are out today. Perhaps the above canines and this will help. By the time you understand love, it may no longer interest you.
Re: Dreams of Neverland: Invitation to Neverland by TLRufener	10-Dec-04/11:58 AM
A delightful fancy that seem calling for meter, even rhyme. I'd sacrifice rhyme though for a steady rhythm.
Re: Going Camping by jessicazee	10-Dec-04/5:21 PM
The first three verses great. And the mulberry tree lines are good - seem to complete the moth lines. But in between, well, why?
Re: Relativity by Bobjim	10-Dec-04/5:29 PM
The first six lines are good, but Einstein's Relativity is not "like" these things.
Re: MONSOON by rrashi	10-Dec-04/6:19 PM
Better than your last. I've never felt a monsoon, but almost can. Could do without "The most poignant pictures it brings," Check punctuation and grammar in the last 4 lines.