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Or So They Say (Free verse) by avery
time awaiting, the instant dissipating, chances are fleeting or so they say. time passes, the emotions rushes, longing is not everlasting or so they say. time heals these wounds are real pain is fleeting or so they say time fades memories of past dates love is not everlasting or so they say but my chances can come again my longing still remains my pain still grieves my love still lives time is neither fleeting nor everlasting or so they say.

Up the ladder: inverse square
Down the ladder: hide and seek

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.9525743
Overall Rank: 8789
Posted: December 5, 2004 9:23 AM PST; Last modified: December 5, 2004 9:23 AM PST
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[8] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 | 5-Dec-04/10:41 AM | Reply
Make the punctuation consistant and the last two lines moire forceful. Otherwise good.
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