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Or So They Say (Free verse) by avery

time awaiting, the instant dissipating, chances are fleeting or so they say. time passes, the emotions rushes, longing is not everlasting or so they say. time heals these wounds are real pain is fleeting or so they say time fades memories of past dates love is not everlasting or so they say but my chances can come again my longing still remains my pain still grieves my love still lives time is neither fleeting nor everlasting or so they say.

Dovina 5-Dec-04/10:41 AM
Make the punctuation consistant and the last two lines moire forceful. Otherwise good.




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