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9-Aug-04/1:19 PM |
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I really like this one, but I thought you didn't like the beach =p
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| Re: A Letter to You by QuirkyWonder |
9-Aug-04/1:38 PM |
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Excellent Poem, captures lots of emotion in a seemingly harmless context. Well done.
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| Re: Concussion + Broken Hearts= bad week by New Life Drug |
9-Aug-04/1:47 PM |
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Well written! The metaphors bouncing back and forth are really powerful.
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| Re: Myself by QuirkyWonder |
11-Aug-04/11:43 AM |
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| Re: To you by freelancejoker |
11-Aug-04/5:44 PM |
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Very descriptive. I love it. Good luck in your endeavors, we all need it.
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| Re: Corner of 30th and Tibbs by klosterfobik |
12-Aug-04/12:16 AM |
I like the repition at the end, adds power. A little choppy, but overall a very nice concept. Stanza 4 is a tad confusing if you were looking for a revision place I might go there. Overall, I like it!
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| Re: Society by QuirkyWonder |
16-Aug-04/4:30 PM |
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26-Sep-04/11:21 PM |
Poetically: -9-
For any hint of realism: -0-
Weighting this with my particular mood, and for the poor lost soul it is destined:
-3-
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26-Sep-04/11:25 PM |
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And If you ever let your guard down enough to let someone truly care for you, hell even help you with anything, perhaps some of that pressure would be gone. I guess it's easier to go around hardened though. Makes it easier to explain things away.
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26-Sep-04/11:29 PM |
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Seems perfectly intact to me~
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| Re: Won't Be Dreaming (co-writer John K) by capachijim |
29-Sep-04/2:53 PM |
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One of the better things I have read on here, well done!
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| Re: Silent by TLRufener |
29-Sep-04/3:00 PM |
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1-Oct-04/9:46 AM |
Poetically speaking, this is actually written pretty well.
With that out of the way, no matter how great a dislike you have for CLS (and I'm not one to argue that point at all), I'm not sure anything like this is ever really acceptable.
So you dislike her because you think her poetry stinks, that's fine. You think she is ignorant for believing in the Trinity, that's fine. Heck maybe you even dislike her because of some childhood incident with a bottle of glue, a pair of scissors, and a girl named Crystal. That's fine.
All that being said, to write a poem about a disabled group of men getting their jollies off with her in a forced, yet wanted, manner seems over the line to me (especially with certain life incidents factored in). Is that the way you actually go around living life?
Trust me, I'm not a huge fan either. But, I wouldn't dream about writing something this filthy about it. Maybe that's just personal opinion though.
-5- for good poetic sense with bad taste
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