on some deleted poem
1 Oct 2004, 11:05 AM
Methodology...
on Society by QuirkyWonder
16 Aug 2004, 4:30 PM
Another very nice one!
on Myself by QuirkyWonder
11 Aug 2004, 11:43 AM
I really like your style
on To you by freelancejoker
11 Aug 2004, 5:44 PM
Very descriptive. I love it. Good luck in your endeavors, we all need it.
on Corner of 30th and Tibbs by klosterfobik
12 Aug 2004, 12:16 AM
I like the repition at the end, adds power. A little choppy, but overall a very nice concept. Stanza 4 is a tad confusing if you were looking for a revision place I might go there. Overall, I like it!
on some deleted poem
9 Aug 2004, 1:19 PM
I really like this one, but I thought you didn't like the beach =p
on Concussion + Broken Hearts= bad week by New Life Drug
9 Aug 2004, 1:47 PM
Well written! The metaphors bouncing back and forth are really powerful.
on A Letter to You by QuirkyWonder
9 Aug 2004, 1:38 PM
Excellent Poem, captures lots of emotion in a seemingly harmless context. Well done.
on some deleted poem
20 Jun 2004, 3:28 AM
Another Beauty....
on some deleted poem
20 Jun 2004, 10:38 PM
Wonderful!
on some deleted poem
15 Jun 2004, 1:10 AM
Very Nice!
on some deleted poem
26 Sep 2004, 11:21 PM
Poetically: -9-
For any hint of realism: -0-
Weighting this with my particular mood, and for the poor lost soul it is destined:
-3-
For any hint of realism: -0-
Weighting this with my particular mood, and for the poor lost soul it is destined:
-3-
on some deleted poem
26 Sep 2004, 11:25 PM
And If you ever let your guard down enough to let someone truly care for you, hell even help you with anything, perhaps some of that pressure would be gone. I guess it's easier to go around hardened though. Makes it easier to explain things away.
on some deleted poem
26 Sep 2004, 11:29 PM
Seems perfectly intact to me~
on Won't Be Dreaming (co-writer John K) by capachijim
29 Sep 2004, 2:53 PM
One of the better things I have read on here, well done!
on some deleted poem
1 Oct 2004, 9:46 AM
Poetically speaking, this is actually written pretty well.
With that out of the way, no matter how great a dislike you have for CLS (and I'm not one to argue that point at all), I'm not sure anything like this is ever really acceptable.
So you dislike her because you think her poetry stinks, that's fine. You think she is ignorant for believing in the Trinity, that's fine. Heck maybe you even dislike her because of some childhood incident with a bottle of glue, a pair of scissors, and a girl named Crystal. That's fine.
All that being said, to write a poem about a disabled group of men getting their jollies off with her in a forced, yet wanted, manner seems over the line to me (especially with certain life incidents factored in). Is that the way you actually go around living life?
Trust me, I'm not a huge fan either. But, I wouldn't dream about writing something this filthy about it. Maybe that's just personal opinion though.
-5- for good poetic sense with bad taste
With that out of the way, no matter how great a dislike you have for CLS (and I'm not one to argue that point at all), I'm not sure anything like this is ever really acceptable.
So you dislike her because you think her poetry stinks, that's fine. You think she is ignorant for believing in the Trinity, that's fine. Heck maybe you even dislike her because of some childhood incident with a bottle of glue, a pair of scissors, and a girl named Crystal. That's fine.
All that being said, to write a poem about a disabled group of men getting their jollies off with her in a forced, yet wanted, manner seems over the line to me (especially with certain life incidents factored in). Is that the way you actually go around living life?
Trust me, I'm not a huge fan either. But, I wouldn't dream about writing something this filthy about it. Maybe that's just personal opinion though.
-5- for good poetic sense with bad taste
on some deleted poem
1 Oct 2004, 11:03 AM
Double Posted: http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j