Re: Sleep Well by jriemerm	23-Aug-02/5:44 AM
This is great. May the birds always be sleeping.
Re: Dignity by kthulah	23-Aug-02/5:50 AM
I like the argument of this - it is very sonnet-like, and so is the 14-line form although you've not gone for a rhyme scheme. I'm not sure the final couplet convinces though - plainly the narrator doesn't love this person more than their dignity, rather, they are afraid of rejection I would think. After all, it is easier to love from afar than to test your love on the 'front line'.
Re: {Porn*Star}{Hai*kus} by horus8	23-Aug-02/6:04 AM
I think my girlfriend's a Leo and we get on alright. I'm a Scorpio. So what does that mean? Someone enlighten me!
Re: Dignity by kthulah	23-Aug-02/6:09 AM
OK, but that background is not clear from the poem itself. But don't get me wrong - I think the dignity of the piece comes over loud and clear.
Re: she wonders, by <~>	23-Aug-02/6:33 AM
If he doesn't do these things , he is a cad and a bounder. I'm sure he could be persuaded.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Aug-02/4:30 AM
Mysterious and tantalising - the relationship between the driver and the woman is very intriguing. There is a deep subtext to this, I like it a lot.
Re: School by shwenatjadeflower	27-Aug-02/6:31 AM
When I had hair, it was red, and my oh my how I feel your pain. I especially like the 'Heh'. Every poem should have one. Bonza.
Re: Innsmouth by razorgrin	27-Aug-02/7:09 AM
I think I need to read some Lovecraft/MR James/Poe etc because there's a lot of stuff on here that I don't get. I bemoan my ignorance.
Re: Reflected, Dreamed by Frass	27-Aug-02/7:36 AM
I find the rhymes a little too facile -the syntactical contortions that you employ to produce the rhymes ('from deep is gleaned') are correspondingly awkward. But maybe it's just because I don't like Dylan Thomas either...
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Aug-02/7:44 AM
Very descriptive and economical - I'm there.
Re: Two Eagles by Frass	27-Aug-02/7:48 AM
This sounds great and I like the cultural history clash - this is an era caught in a moment. I don't like 'Keybored' though - tricksy.
Re: School by shwenatjadeflower	27-Aug-02/7:51 AM
Red heads must stick together. We are an abused minority.
Re: Innsmouth by razorgrin	27-Aug-02/7:53 AM
I shall tootle down to my library forthwith in search of creepiness. I like N Hawthorne though - what do you reckon of him?
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Aug-02/8:07 AM
'Naive as turnips' alone merits big points. I like the picture of the obliviousness of children and the knowledge of its transience. And turnips basically rock.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Aug-02/8:14 AM
This treads the line between sexiness and violence very carefully. The woman is at first alluring and then scarily needy - the 'beautiful fierce arms' are threatening and sexual. It's not a new observation that sex and violence often go together, but it is done well here. God's wife, you've completely thrown out all your stuff from last week - why?
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Aug-02/8:16 AM
I think that maybe there is nothing else to say. Except I hope you got rid of him.
Re: Tryst by <~>	28-Aug-02/1:38 AM
Well, I think this stays funny after a couple of readings - it's a kind of gallows humour, becuase you know why it feels all wrong and yet it feels all right. I know the feeling. It often gives me cause to laugh on a long and lonely night. Oh ha ha ha.
Re: 'The Grey' Triplet by Shin-Bojangles	28-Aug-02/1:42 AM
The mention of Enya tunes makes me chuckle
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Aug-02/2:02 AM
I like this, has a country kind of atmos I think. Perhaps if Dusty Springfield did country, she would sing something like this. In fact I'm hearing chords and basslines and everything. Woohoo!
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Aug-02/2:06 AM
I like this, the run-on rhythms and enjmabemenet and all, but i wish I knew what the reference was about. It sounds very X Files - is this based on a true story?