Re: a comment on Seekers by Dovina	Dovina 24.59.205.78	22-Sep-05/1:57 PM
Unlike a mouth plum, plum here describes a vertical surface, the side of a church. The tree with its irregular shape seems to say to the church, "Why are you so square and rigid compared to us natural things?"
Re: a comment on Elmer's Last Try by Dovina	Dovina 24.59.205.78	22-Sep-05/1:54 PM
Trucking accross country like us I guess. No time for satire. I,ll be doin' Philadelphia to LA soon.
Re: a comment on Elmer's Last Try by Dovina	Dovina 24.59.205.78	22-Sep-05/1:52 PM
Did you try to resist voting and succeeded.
Re: a comment on Elmer's Last Try by Dovina	Dovina 24.59.205.78	22-Sep-05/1:51 PM
Not as much as a proud child's derision. But it's not about parent-child, but rather husband-wife.
Re: a comment on untitled Rubiyat 1 by starkfister	starkfister 12.221.176.84	22-Sep-05/1:36 PM
the Rubiyat is a traditional form of persian poetry, following the AABA BBCB CCDC DDAD rhyme scheme. it can go longer of course, as long as the last stanza ties into the first on the 3 line. you get the idea.
Re: Elmer's Last Try by Dovina	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.151.147.145	22-Sep-05/6:50 AM
A bedwetting can test even the most devoted parent's love.
Re: a comment on "46 million babies a year" by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.151.147.145	22-Sep-05/4:17 AM
It died of exposure.
Re: "46 million babies a year" by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	zodiac 212.38.134.51	22-Sep-05/12:19 AM
How did the Dumpling die? Did He squeeze it too hard? Did it just dry out?
Re: a comment on Seekers by Dovina	zodiac 212.38.134.51	21-Sep-05/11:43 PM
Talking about human beings' purpose so much here is giving me epilepsy. Pppleassse evvverrrybooddy stopppppp.
Re: Elmer's Last Try by Dovina	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.67	21-Sep-05/8:04 PM
Sad. Interesting swap there. Unlike me and my heavily cliched (and sedated) poems. I think I should like to try an inversion someday. How much does the safety equipment cost? Man, the rankers dead lately!
Re: a comment on If I Were a Bird by TLRufener	TLRufener 140.146.216.76	21-Sep-05/2:54 PM
Thanks, I love you, too.
Re: untitled Rubiyat 1 by starkfister	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	21-Sep-05/2:50 PM
Interesting rhyme pattern.
Re: Light by Quarton	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	21-Sep-05/2:37 PM
Like Dovina said nice metaphor. This shows the duality between human nature and science. Science has no compassion but human nature has its moments. Your still improving. Which is more than most of us can say.
Re: Elmer's Last Try by Dovina	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	21-Sep-05/1:55 PM
You forgot to end with th-th-th-that's all folks. Sorry I tried so hard to resist it but failed.
Re: "46 million babies a year" by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	21-Sep-05/1:46 PM
Shitty poem.
Re: Light by Quarton	Dovina 24.58.115.77	21-Sep-05/1:32 PM
A good comparison.
Re: a comment on Light by Quarton	Quarton 12.217.202.34	21-Sep-05/9:53 AM
Thanks for the read. I changed mammouth to giant and it is a glowfly, not a gladfly which I somehow bungled. Also changed explode to implode which is what a supernova does prior to becoming a black hole.
Re: Nowhere Land by Caducus	impert&ent 82.46.138.68	21-Sep-05/9:37 AM
There's much to like in this, but there are a couple of loose ends too. I like the imagery and the metaphors. But I don't get the "robins staff", and think the focus changes in the last line, and leaves the thing unresolved. If the staff were a coat hook, it would make sense to me, given that your coat is the rain. As for the last line, you may set spectacular, but in a solitary land of your own rather than nowhere. But why focus on yourself at the end, given that up to that point the focus is on her and the love?
Re: Light by Quarton	INTRANSIT 205.188.116.69	21-Sep-05/9:20 AM
I'm reading an anthology right now: Staying alive (real poems for unreal times) By Neil Astley. I remember a poem that made mention of black holes or a black hole and your poetry came to mind. I cant seem to find the poem but the whole anthology is reeeeeely good. Um, mamm-outh? and gladfly/glowfly? Planet-fly or moon-fly could be used? don't know. 8
Re: Nowhere Land by Caducus	Quarton 12.217.202.34	21-Sep-05/9:08 AM
I am a bit confused by parts of this but overall, I found myself liking it. And it is up to the reader to interpret your meaning.