Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	BrandonW 216.78.63.212	16-Nov-05/3:31 PM
Umm.. its not that literal I don't guess.. My girlfriend of two years and I split up, she was religous. I was not.
Re: a comment on The Gate of Heaven by TLRufener	TLRufener 140.146.216.76	16-Nov-05/3:21 PM
I am Woman. Hear me Roar.
Re: a comment on Sienna by oneglove	oneglove 24.171.9.144	16-Nov-05/2:13 PM
wow, thank you.
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	Dovina 17.255.240.138	16-Nov-05/1:05 PM
Nobody tried to force any belief in God or Snorks on you by saying that you assume God. I cannot imagine a question starting with "Could God'" having any good answer other than "yes."
Re: a comment on The Gate of Heaven by TLRufener	Dovina 17.255.240.138	16-Nov-05/12:56 PM
To continue this "fight" as Dancing Shamrock called our last debate, is to ask him to delete everything, as he did on the last.
Re: a comment on Racism by Dovina	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.151.150.39	16-Nov-05/12:30 PM
ALChemy, are you a Black?
Re: a comment on Racism by Dovina	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.151.150.39	16-Nov-05/12:29 PM
Dear God you haven't really been there, have you? I toil next to St Paul's Cathedral, quite near Ye Olde Cheshire Cheese. I'd hate to bump into you one day -- as a general rule I don't socialise with racists.
Re: a comment on Haven by cyan9	cyan9 84.12.150.59	16-Nov-05/11:32 AM
In response to "You're saying to yourself, "What's he talking about?" Of course you are. " >> I am afraid you are incorrecton this matter, unlike in your closing sentance; I am saying "Surely this underdeveloped and immature poetry snob again". I don't know how old you are, but you really need to mature a few years before engaging with people again. I see that origionality has also fled you, and that you suffer from the same problem as zodiac, you cannot see past the words to the picture that the author is painting for you, whether that be emotional, image based, intellectual... wake up.
Re: a comment on When Did You Walk Away? by TLRufener	TLRufener 140.146.138.52	16-Nov-05/11:24 AM
I write my poems to help myself come to terms with feelings that I have. Many of my poems have stories behind them and out of context, they don't make sense. I just look for opinions on the writing and possible meanings to find a different way to look at them.
Re: a comment on Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9	cyan9 84.12.150.59	16-Nov-05/11:23 AM
Piss taking aside: In contrast to what I have just sent over as a comment to you, this kind of commentry and thought is more than welcome compared to untangeable quippets that serve to flame zodiacs mild annoying and invalid mockery. The punctuation is only there to provide appropriate length pauses, its symantic is in the ride it provokes. I would rather steer clear of the colons on the grounds that they invoke a list or parrallel verses; what I am writing is continuous verse, and thus I use semi-colons. I only use quotes in order to quote a person, or to indicate speach; and so again their use is inapropriate here. When you see use of language such as one bright one light, take it for what it is, and what it provokes. Don't get so pent up on the syntax, and concentrate on the semantic and the ride. As far as I am aware there is nothing here that should cause anyone any difficulty in reading, as long as they just let it sink in, rather than fixate upon its syntax. As for the biting comments, I write the comments in spare minutes that I have at work, I have little time to spare to check spelling and punctuation when engaging in slanging matches between teenage poetry snobs. The comments are less snide, but more of a irritated response to the image that you and zodiac have presented. I welcome the chance to receive feedback on my work, and get distinctly annoyed when I receive time waisting comments.
Re: a comment on Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9	cyan9 84.12.150.59	16-Nov-05/11:03 AM
If it gets rid of you, now please dont leave any of your intellectually and emotionally devoid commentry near any of my work again.
Re: Sienna by oneglove	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	16-Nov-05/11:02 AM
Thanks.
Re: a comment on Haven by cyan9	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	16-Nov-05/10:57 AM
You pretty much explained his comment without even knowing it. You're saying to yourself, "What's he talking about?" Of course you are. Let me show you. cyan9, If you are going to leave poems like this, please save your energy,(. It) it shows quite a degree of disregard and emotional underdevelopement to see it (your poetry) as a dictionary of words rather than to view and experience the sensations of the scene unfolding. As for being formatted by a post-prime Billy Corgan, this means it's (your poem's) of no value or use, and looks like you are trying to sound more intelligent than you are. I appreciate the fact that you are giving by posting your poems (which is one better than most people) but please have a think about what you are giving. This poem has served no use to me, and has caused very mild offense,(.) what was the point? Don't worry cyan9. You'll still win the argument because like Jason Voorhees you just won't stop hacking away and die already.
Re: Aurora by Aetius	<~> 167.206.181.179	16-Nov-05/10:52 AM
nice one.
Re: a comment on Aurora by Aetius	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	16-Nov-05/10:25 AM
I could if you'd post it.
Re: a comment on Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	16-Nov-05/10:17 AM
Awwww. Have we so quickly resorted to name calling? Don't worry, you are so much better at insulting yourself with your inept ability to write a proper sentence with at least a seventh grade grasp of punctuation and capitalization. Congrats for spelling guess right this time. Sure, we could run this thing into the ground but I've done this before with far wiser than you. Quite frankly, You have issues and nothing I can say or do is going to solve them or likely shut your ass up. So I'm taking the high road and conceding all arguments between us officially won by cyan9. Are you happy now? Nope, didn't think so.
Re: a comment on Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	16-Nov-05/9:52 AM
Proper punctuation might help a little too. Try one of these (:) or ("") or just drop the damn period. What do I think of your poem? It's not bad in an acid trip kind of way. You seem to portray the operating table as the dream and the nature scene as the world you wake up to. If that was your intent then good job. The average person would have gone the opposite route. "one bright one light"??? In the future if you choose to make your biting comments then at least check it for faults. Nothing makes you appear to need a slightly more intelligence than a snide reply full of errors.
Re: a comment on Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9	cyan9 217.40.63.105	16-Nov-05/9:15 AM
Still fail to what? make sense? I guess that you mean that I fail to set you off, should that be the case, I think you should get back to the other kids in the nursery before I do something to really set you off. Although, maybe you can't go back there because they all think your as much of a muppet as I do.
Re: a comment on Aurora by Aetius	Aetius 71.112.163.184	16-Nov-05/9:10 AM
Hadn't noticed. You should see what the Sonnet I wrote spells out!
Re: a comment on Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	16-Nov-05/9:00 AM
And yet you still fail to.