-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
replying on Us Sinners by BrandonW
19 Nov 2005, 5:59 PM
Saying "I could trump you but won't" is the worst of both worlds. Not only do you keep your ego in tact by letting everyone know you could grind your opponent to a pulp, but you also casually 'avoid' the guilt associated with publicly humiliating someone. It's an easy game to play, provided you don't let a little thing called integrity stand in the way. The rest of us aren't so greasy. In future, if you can trump someone, have the balls to trump them openly. If you can't, or won't because you're against trumping on principle, then don't you dare try to take the moral high ground by positing a stealth trump, then pretending it never existed.
You've sent me scurrying around to see where I said you wrote something from LaLa Land. I did make a comment like that awhile back, but I don't see it on any of your poems. Did you delete a poem? Remind me and I'll look at it again.
As a general comment, your poems and comments have been good.
Thanks for commenting.
A good take on leaves and cycles. Line 2 seems to have an "and" and a "the" too many. Track marks in bark might better be under cambium - just a suggestion.
I think "Submission" which runs along similar lines is better.
Excellent as this is, I still cant believe you tried to criticise me for writing something from LaLa land. The Salivating line and the concept of the piece are excellent, making for pleasurable, surreal, (though not bizarre) reading.
I don't want to cause offence, but this does suck.
Had to rate this lowly, you've shot yourself in the foot, the fingers, the face and the butt with that last line.
You didn't write this, did you?
Is there any subject from which I am not disqualified due to one of your strongly held beliefs? Yes, I can describe some of your strongly held beliefs and how you came to believe them.
I would, in fact, argue with: "when you or I assume God, we almost always assume Christian God." But you and I know the direction that silly arguement would go. I could posit a good response, and say "Trump." But you know my position on trumping. I could do the same with "'There either is God, or there isn't' is a very Christian-God-minded thing to say." No point.
I don't particularly believe in believing either. I particularly don't believe in assuming beliefs in others when they have not clearly stated or lived out those beliefs.
A wise fish enticed to a pier-dangled hook will consider the source - Dovina
I was able to avoid the locusts. I wasn't able to avoid the mosquito, who was, and still is, real-life.
- Oh, almost forgot your gift:
HISTORY
Jennifer Michael Hecht
Even Eve, the only soul in all of time
to never have to wait for love,
must have leaned some sleepless nights
alone against the garden wall
and wailed, cold, stupified, and wild
and wished to trade-in all of Eden
to have but been a child.
In fact I gather that is why she leapt and fell from grace,
that she might have a story of herself to tell
in some other place.
I was referring to your comment "A Right Brain cannot get this I know", which is surely directed at me. You'll deny. I won't care.
As a woman, you are disqualified from describing the perfect woman. Your perfect woman is undoubtedly a man.
I think when you or I assume God, we almost always assume Christian God. You can argue, but "There either is God, or there isn't" is a very Christian-God-minded thing to say.
I'm not hedging; I don't particularly believe in believing. I'll refuse to admit or deny the existence of anything unproven or unproveable.
Call it a pier, then. Fishing, anyone?
Is that Mark Twain? This is:
"If Christ were here there is one thing he would not be - a Christian."
"There has been only one Christian. They caught him and crucified him - early."
The Perfect Woman
Doesn't she realize
what I see through these eyes
Tis not the milk white skin
or silken hair
nor blushed cheeks
or flush red lips
not starlight eyes that in
mine eyes the sun cannot compair
Doesn't she comprehend
why I love her without end
The answers in her foolish grin
and her subtle intellect
her hopeless dreams
her clueless schemes
For she is not perfection
and that is why she is perfect
Why assume some particular god and adhere, because of an assumption, to some book? There either is God, or there isn't. If God is, we cannot confine or even describe Him. You say you don't particularly believe in god, which is hedging in the agnostic direction, atheist perhaps, except for your prior denial of atheism.
As you know, I think there is God. Much of the Bible points to God, and some of it might even be inspired by Him. But other parts are, by the authors' own admission, merely literature.
A bridge incomplete traverses no river - Dovina
I could describe a perfect woman better, but please allow him his fantasy.
To say Caducus is Right-brained is to say that he leans toward the artistic side of his brain, favoring it over the logical side. It's not the same as catagorizing to the extent of prejudice. We use labels all the time, it's part of language.