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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. replying on Us Sinners by BrandonW 19 Nov 2005, 5:59 PM
Saying "I could trump you but won't" is the worst of both worlds. Not only do you keep your ego in tact by letting everyone know you could grind your opponent to a pulp, but you also casually 'avoid' the guilt associated with publicly humiliating someone. It's an easy game to play, provided you don't let a little thing called integrity stand in the way. The rest of us aren't so greasy. In future, if you can trump someone, have the balls to trump them openly. If you can't, or won't because you're against trumping on principle, then don't you dare try to take the moral high ground by positing a stealth trump, then pretending it never existed.
Dovina replying on Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina 19 Nov 2005, 4:41 PM
You've sent me scurrying around to see where I said you wrote something from LaLa Land. I did make a comment like that awhile back, but I don't see it on any of your poems. Did you delete a poem? Remind me and I'll look at it again. As a general comment, your poems and comments have been good. Thanks for commenting.
Dovina on Amber's Witness by cyan9 19 Nov 2005, 4:35 PM
A good take on leaves and cycles. Line 2 seems to have an "and" and a "the" too many. Track marks in bark might better be under cambium - just a suggestion.
Dovina replying on Math Poem 4 by Dovina 19 Nov 2005, 4:15 PM
I think "Submission" which runs along similar lines is better.
cyan9 on Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina 19 Nov 2005, 4:14 PM
Excellent as this is, I still cant believe you tried to criticise me for writing something from LaLa land. The Salivating line and the concept of the piece are excellent, making for pleasurable, surreal, (though not bizarre) reading.
cyan9 on Math Poem 4 by Dovina 19 Nov 2005, 4:09 PM
I don't want to cause offence, but this does suck.
cyan9 on soon i will travel by ay deee 19 Nov 2005, 4:04 PM
Had to rate this lowly, you've shot yourself in the foot, the fingers, the face and the butt with that last line.
Dovina replying on Us Sinners by BrandonW 19 Nov 2005, 3:55 PM
You didn't write this, did you?
Dovina replying on Us Sinners by BrandonW 19 Nov 2005, 3:49 PM
Is there any subject from which I am not disqualified due to one of your strongly held beliefs? Yes, I can describe some of your strongly held beliefs and how you came to believe them.
Dovina replying on Us Sinners by BrandonW 19 Nov 2005, 3:44 PM
I would, in fact, argue with: "when you or I assume God, we almost always assume Christian God." But you and I know the direction that silly arguement would go. I could posit a good response, and say "Trump." But you know my position on trumping. I could do the same with "'There either is God, or there isn't' is a very Christian-God-minded thing to say." No point. I don't particularly believe in believing either. I particularly don't believe in assuming beliefs in others when they have not clearly stated or lived out those beliefs. A wise fish enticed to a pier-dangled hook will consider the source - Dovina
zodiac replying on Blackout, Amman, November, 2005 by zodiac 19 Nov 2005, 11:49 AM
I was able to avoid the locusts. I wasn't able to avoid the mosquito, who was, and still is, real-life.
zodiac replying on Bread and blackthorns by Caducus 19 Nov 2005, 11:47 AM
- Oh, almost forgot your gift: HISTORY Jennifer Michael Hecht Even Eve, the only soul in all of time to never have to wait for love, must have leaned some sleepless nights alone against the garden wall and wailed, cold, stupified, and wild and wished to trade-in all of Eden to have but been a child. In fact I gather that is why she leapt and fell from grace, that she might have a story of herself to tell in some other place.
zodiac replying on Bread and blackthorns by Caducus 19 Nov 2005, 11:46 AM
I was referring to your comment "A Right Brain cannot get this I know", which is surely directed at me. You'll deny. I won't care.
zodiac replying on Us Sinners by BrandonW 19 Nov 2005, 11:41 AM
As a woman, you are disqualified from describing the perfect woman. Your perfect woman is undoubtedly a man.
zodiac replying on Us Sinners by BrandonW 19 Nov 2005, 11:40 AM
I think when you or I assume God, we almost always assume Christian God. You can argue, but "There either is God, or there isn't" is a very Christian-God-minded thing to say. I'm not hedging; I don't particularly believe in believing. I'll refuse to admit or deny the existence of anything unproven or unproveable. Call it a pier, then. Fishing, anyone?
zodiac replying on Us Sinners by BrandonW 19 Nov 2005, 11:35 AM
Is that Mark Twain? This is: "If Christ were here there is one thing he would not be - a Christian." "There has been only one Christian. They caught him and crucified him - early."
ALChemy replying on Us Sinners by BrandonW 19 Nov 2005, 8:52 AM
The Perfect Woman Doesn't she realize what I see through these eyes Tis not the milk white skin or silken hair nor blushed cheeks or flush red lips not starlight eyes that in mine eyes the sun cannot compair Doesn't she comprehend why I love her without end The answers in her foolish grin and her subtle intellect her hopeless dreams her clueless schemes For she is not perfection and that is why she is perfect
Dovina replying on Us Sinners by BrandonW 19 Nov 2005, 8:01 AM
Why assume some particular god and adhere, because of an assumption, to some book? There either is God, or there isn't. If God is, we cannot confine or even describe Him. You say you don't particularly believe in god, which is hedging in the agnostic direction, atheist perhaps, except for your prior denial of atheism. As you know, I think there is God. Much of the Bible points to God, and some of it might even be inspired by Him. But other parts are, by the authors' own admission, merely literature. A bridge incomplete traverses no river - Dovina
Dovina replying on Us Sinners by BrandonW 19 Nov 2005, 7:37 AM
I could describe a perfect woman better, but please allow him his fantasy.
Dovina replying on Bread and blackthorns by Caducus 19 Nov 2005, 7:25 AM
To say Caducus is Right-brained is to say that he leans toward the artistic side of his brain, favoring it over the logical side. It's not the same as catagorizing to the extent of prejudice. We use labels all the time, it's part of language.