Re: For Love of Baseball by Dovina	some deleted user 204.97.18.119	1-Jan-06/3:01 PM
Ah ha! a baseball convert. Welcome to the world of interchangable heroes (free agency).
Re: Body & Earth by PoeticXTC	some deleted user 204.97.18.142	1-Jan-06/2:39 PM
I'm sorry. I meant I'm not familiar with this style (sestina)--you still get a 9.
Re: Body & Earth by PoeticXTC	some deleted user 204.97.18.142	1-Jan-06/2:35 PM
I'm not with this style (sestina), but it looks difficult, and for that you get a 9.
Re: a comment on Shadow's Stride by D. $ Fontera	D. $ Fontera 207.200.116.132	1-Jan-06/12:41 PM
Whittle only, but thanks.
Re: a comment on A Shortcut to Summer by Enkidu	Enkidu 207.200.116.132	1-Jan-06/12:37 PM
pronounced "woond"
Re: a comment on Nightfall by Niphredil	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.138	1-Jan-06/12:10 PM
What are you? 100% Vulcan? If every poem were perfectly logical, would they be poems anymore? I think not. They would be Wapiti. Either you've been spending too much time discussing certain things with a certain group or you need a heavy dose of Uhura.
Re: a comment on Nightfall by Niphredil	Niphredil 192.117.121.155	1-Jan-06/10:43 AM
The idea was of someone lying beneath a cedar tree, looking up; what they would see is a dark web of branches, framed by lighter foggy sky. Hence, the cedar tree is 'darkling', from that person's point of view. Nightfall would darken those gaps of foggy sky, rendering the landscape entirely black. Besides, it doesn't even start snowing till the stanza before last! The 'softness' in the last stanza is meant to convey the image that the narrator is covered in snow. I'm afraid my logic still holds... in addition to the fact that I don't *have* to describe snow falling on somebody's face. :-)
Re: A Shortcut to Summer by Enkidu	Dovina 209.247.222.83	1-Jan-06/9:03 AM
Wound the world?
Re: a comment on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 209.247.222.83	1-Jan-06/8:48 AM
Have you stuck gum between your Y and T keys, or is it chewing tobacco?
Re: a comment on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	1-Jan-06/8:06 AM
Or: ABC. It's east as 123. It's east as Doh Ray Mee...
Re: loved once by celticskatermatt1	Dovina 209.247.222.97	1-Jan-06/7:42 AM
"again" leave out "once" Very sketchy, but good.
Re: Half of All My Lies are True by Enkidu	Dovina 209.247.222.97	1-Jan-06/7:40 AM
I know a passionate man who speaks in apparent lies and nonsense to let me know his feelings, because feelings mean more to him than making sense. If this is something like what you want to say, I think you could refine it into something more compelling.
Re: Unspoken by Heather2119	Dovina 209.247.222.97	1-Jan-06/7:34 AM
Good material for a poem here. You just need to write a poem about it, and get the grammar straight.
Re: Nightfall by Niphredil	Dovina 209.247.222.97	1-Jan-06/7:33 AM
"Darkling" means "in the dark." So how can the day grow dimmer when it's already dark? Also, if the cedar tree is snowy, and it's branches sway in the breeze, why is there no mention of snow falling in the face of someone lying under it? It flows well, but I can't get past illogic.
Re: a comment on Romans 8:28 by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 209.247.222.97	1-Jan-06/7:21 AM
I think we should functionalize it: K + L = W. Then we could say that W - L + K or L = W - K. Maybe God would be pleased with that since it presents several propositions that we can test logically.
Re: Shadow's Stride by D. $ Fontera	some deleted user 204.97.18.217	1-Jan-06/3:51 AM
Should "shred" be "shed," and "whiddle" be "whittle?" confusing.
Re: My Interesting Life by Dovina	some deleted user 204.97.18.217	1-Jan-06/3:46 AM
This is really good--what more needs to be said?
Re: Crowded by INTRANSIT	some deleted user 204.97.18.217	1-Jan-06/3:39 AM
Nicely done!
Re: Fate is Great by MacFrantic	some deleted user 204.97.18.217	1-Jan-06/3:31 AM
I like.
Re: Nightfall by Niphredil	some deleted user 204.97.18.217	1-Jan-06/3:24 AM
Nicely done. You are an extremely talented writer and it's a pleasure read your work.