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loved once (Free verse) by celticskatermatt1 Changing my mind once agian
Slowly going, never stopping
Rightfully you are to blame
So mezmorizing so intense
Brings shame to a man in love.
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Posted: December 30, 2005 8:06 PM PST; Last modified: December 30, 2005 8:10 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.9551764 Overall Rank: 8734 Comments:
I don't get it.....seems too disconnected.
'again'>typo. I take it you are afraid to commit...once bitten, twice shy thing here? It could have been more clear. Why the shame? 258 view(s)
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leave out "once"
Very sketchy, but good.