Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	zodiac 209.193.14.236	18-Jan-06/10:24 AM
http://www.alsopreview.com/gaz/lessons/plpoet.html
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	zodiac 209.193.14.236	18-Jan-06/10:24 AM
http://www.alsopreview.com/gaz/lessons/pllines.html
Re: Read this by Southern_Bell	cyan9 217.40.63.105	18-Jan-06/9:37 AM
The statement is too true, but the poem is crap.
Re: Three Skinheads by Caducus	cyan9 217.40.63.105	18-Jan-06/9:36 AM
Some very good lines in here, although a lot of the verses seem to be built around this lines, condensing it could improve the experience for people like me.
Re: Is Dying Ugly? by D. $ Fontera	cyan9 217.40.63.105	18-Jan-06/9:34 AM
You have put such minimal thought into this poem, and such minimal effort into making it a poem.
Re: the black light by crwncka1	cyan9 217.40.63.105	18-Jan-06/9:32 AM
Interesting as a story, but the repetition of words to be creepy comes off making it sound like it should be read to scare children on halloween.
Re: a comment on A tribute to our most precious Pearl by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	18-Jan-06/9:08 AM
So... This is hardly the place to worry about sounding unsympathetic. Tell her what you think. Even if she won't change this poem your ideas may effect the next poem she writes. Anybody who complains about valid negetive criticism as being cruel is a total pussy.
Re: Racism 4 by Dovina	Caducus 195.224.86.71	18-Jan-06/8:42 AM
Stanza on eand three very solid. The end borders jerry springer final thought though.
Re: A tribute to our most precious Pearl by amanda_dcosta	Caducus 195.224.86.71	18-Jan-06/8:40 AM
Dont know the history of the drafts but dont care its one of those poems which moves me. That rarely happens.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	18-Jan-06/5:20 AM
My God man, you left out some of the best parts: http://www.alsopreview.com/gaz/lessons/pldonts.html I think he nails all our asses at least once with the many cliches he exposes.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	18-Jan-06/4:58 AM
He's probably been to this site then.
Re: Jailbird by zodiac	MacFrantic 172.197.129.206	17-Jan-06/11:00 PM
Oh, if only I could express how great this truly is. *11*
Re: My Reason by PoeticXTC	MacFrantic 172.197.129.206	17-Jan-06/10:57 PM
This could have been much better, still, *7*
Re: Spinning, reeling by ecargo	MacFrantic 172.197.129.206	17-Jan-06/10:51 PM
Hah, this is pretty damn good, and I don't care at all about what you have to say. *9*
Re: Pain, I Curse Thee by woodstock20000	MacFrantic 172.197.129.206	17-Jan-06/10:49 PM
I don't know why, but I like this.P-e-rish *7*
Re: a comment on My Reason by PoeticXTC	PoeticXTC 205.188.117.6	17-Jan-06/7:47 PM
understandable
Re: Last Call by thepinkbunnyofdoom	drnick 24.176.22.254	17-Jan-06/6:18 PM
I feel like I can relate to this one, I like it a lot.
Re: a comment on Racism 4 by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	17-Jan-06/5:51 PM
Yes, I think I'll do the same. It's a hard decision - but yes.
Re: Racism 4 by Dovina	INTRANSIT 69.19.14.25	17-Jan-06/5:47 PM
I think I will drop my next poem which also deals or doesn't deal with racism here before I drop it "over there".
Re: A tribute to our most precious Pearl by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 69.175.32.104	17-Jan-06/5:39 PM
Amanda, I hate being the referee who calls an unpopular foul, but that’s how I feel. You have posted a poem, written in a time of sorrow, that you say you do not intend to edit and which you admit needs editing. I take the poem as heartfelt sentiment for a wonderful grandmother, and for that it is a good poem. But I think the “foul” comes when you post it on a site for voting and commenting, because there is little a commenter can say without sounding unsympathetic, and to vote low is show lack of sympathy for your feelings or lack of appreciation for your grandmother. Hope you understand.