Re: a comment on A Schizophrenic by amanda_dcosta	zodiac 209.193.9.123	24-Jan-06/12:31 PM
In America, people say "schiz" sometimes, meaning "a schizo person".
Re: a comment on A Schizophrenic by amanda_dcosta	zodiac 209.193.9.123	24-Jan-06/12:30 PM
Oh, I thought you were saying you didn't personally know any schizophrenics. Sorry, I misread. I've worked in a couple of mental hospitals, too, you know.
Re: a comment on When God is Needed No More by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	24-Jan-06/12:11 PM
God bless you. You've got that part perfect. I meant Blake was my motive for sounding almost cheesy with the faithful parts and philosophical with the skeptic parts. Were I missed like you said is in the crumbling rhythm. Blake had great rhythm.
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	24-Jan-06/12:01 PM
Oh look the irony detector went off:)
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	24-Jan-06/11:59 AM
Do we dare ask?
Re: a comment on When God is Needed No More by ALChemy	Dovina 69.175.32.104	24-Jan-06/11:58 AM
Please stop wallowing in your beer, it's not manly. You have not failed miserably. You have succeeded in showing a facet of God that is not commonly shown, and which I rather like. And even a little more Biblical reference would be okay in this setting. I see it as recognition of God's goodness in making us, and His even betterness in making us so good that perhaps we don't need Him after childhood. I find it a concept worth pondering, but not completely agreeable.
Re: a comment on On Golden Bond by jmalone	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	24-Jan-06/11:56 AM
You've heard terms like "Rough waters ahead" or "Bridge over troubled waters" or "Raging like a river". The grandmother's trying to keep those kind of waters in the boy still.
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	24-Jan-06/11:50 AM
Most of ecargo's comments and poems lately imply womanhood. But the old stuff implies manhood. So, I don't get it either.
Re: a comment on When God is Needed No More by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	24-Jan-06/11:46 AM
Sure, it is a summary. Good children connects the start and end of the poem. It starts with the scene of some older, wiser person teaching or preaching or whatever you want to call it, to the children of the world. Considering the subject matter and my motive of putting skepticism and faith side by side harmoniously in a poem, it seems acceptable to me to use preachy, dogmatic and even a little biblical cliche language when representing the faith side of the poem. In short, you're noticing things I hoped you would but you're missing my reasons for putting them there. So in that way I've failed miserably. You've really given me alot to think about and I thank you.
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	24-Jan-06/11:29 AM
Sorry, I don't get it.
Re: a comment on On Golden Bond by jmalone	Dovina 69.175.32.104	24-Jan-06/11:27 AM
Yes, I see how the grandmother gave him what he needed and sent him out, like God does in your poem. But "scope" is unclear, except that it rhymes, and what does "to keep the waters still" mean?
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	24-Jan-06/11:25 AM
Yes, it is good to know a man's genetics. So are you a man or a woman ecargo?
Re: Rain by dancin_n_da_moonlite	Dovina 69.175.32.104	24-Jan-06/11:23 AM
I wish you would not recycle all of your poems in one day. Give us a break!
Re: a comment on When God is Needed No More by ALChemy	Dovina 69.175.32.104	24-Jan-06/11:19 AM
I understand the last four lines, but they seem like a summary of what has already been preached (and I've already said that I don't mind the preaching in this pooem. That would not be bad, except that the closing lines are dogmatic ("it is God's plan") and bland ("his good children"), and only the last line seems important. Sorry to stomp on your children, accidentally of course.
Re: In praise of racism by INTRANSIT	Alizarin_Crimson 71.131.189.202	24-Jan-06/11:15 AM
Yay. Really enjoyed this one.
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	24-Jan-06/11:09 AM
What on earth do you mean? I always want a gentleman!
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	24-Jan-06/11:08 AM
It's always good to know a man's genetics before any serious discussion. Thanks for giving yours. And please stick around this time.
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	24-Jan-06/11:07 AM
But only "when" you want us to be gentle.
Re: a comment on A Schizophrenic by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 69.175.32.104	24-Jan-06/11:06 AM
The "Mood . . ." sentenced is vague and bland at written, in my opinion. Your explanation of it is crisp and clear. So although my question is satisfied, the sentence is still not so good.
Re: a comment on A Sheep’s Wish by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	24-Jan-06/10:49 AM
We want them to be gentle, that’s all. And we know it’s not their nature, at least for many rams. The poem overstates that, I admit, but it’s for emphasis. Good point.