Re: a comment on An Understanding Woman by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	6-Feb-06/11:48 PM
It differs depending where you are. Some places even use a different color code. Way back when I worked at Sam's Club the codes were; Black:Dangerous weather or blackout, Red:Fire, Orange:Chemical spill, Blue:Medical emergency, Brown:Bomb threat, Code Adam was a missing child- and so on and so on. The procedures differ as well. It's funny, if you're in Sam's Club and you hear "Code Black" you're going to remember that show and run out of the building and probably into a tornado or something.
Re: as you are by Adriaan	drnick 24.176.22.254	6-Feb-06/11:45 PM
That's very nice, I like it!
Re: a comment on Tonight (edit) by drnick	drnick 24.176.22.254	6-Feb-06/11:24 PM
I wish.
Re: a comment on Tonight (edit) by drnick	drnick 24.176.22.254	6-Feb-06/11:22 PM
That's exactly what I meant, ie playing hard to get. I try to stay away from directly saying things so the poem's meaning can be different for anyone. I usually fail at that. thanks for the input
Re: Blackbirds III by jmalone	celticskatermatt1 68.8.219.40	6-Feb-06/8:02 PM
pretty swell
Re: a comment on An Understanding Woman by Dovina	zodiac 209.193.9.218	6-Feb-06/4:30 PM
We'd already decided "Code Black" meant explosives, but were at a loss to figure out how they'd reasonably handle it. The 'accidental' Code Black seemed like kind of a cop-out. And unreasonable.
Re: a comment on An Understanding Woman by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	6-Feb-06/3:39 PM
You certainly must admire the gall to build an episode around something as ridiculous as accidentally firing and injecting a bazooka shell into yourself. Now if Richard Gere had done it I would have bought the premise entirely.
Re: a comment on An Understanding Woman by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	6-Feb-06/3:33 PM
May I ask why there are two votes from your IP, a 4 and an 8?
Re: a comment on An Understanding Woman by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	6-Feb-06/3:30 PM
By Job you’re right – 200! I hadn’t noticed. I’m sick, really sick! When Shuushin posted his hundredth, he called it Centennial Man. How about Withered Old Woman?
Re: Whales in Gastineau Channel by zodiac	richa 81.178.221.104	6-Feb-06/3:10 PM
Isn't it more fragile (I know you put in fragiler for a reason but I am at a loss, other than to make the poem more idiosyncratic, what that reason is). And the last sentence doesn't do it. There is no need to talk of your ache, it is inferred by your opposition to 'something always fragiler'. I think the poem would end better keeping on the theme of others yen for fragility. Then don't touch it. The details are fine.
Re: I Heart You by Enkidu	richa 81.178.221.104	6-Feb-06/2:51 PM
Does the narrator have Parkinson's.
Re: time (3rd draft) by Adriaan	richa 81.178.221.104	6-Feb-06/2:50 PM
It looks more like a haiku. Haikus demand economy. They often have two images the second cutting across the first. They have no message as such. They are sensory. If you think you have some interesting wisdom do an epigram.
Re: a comment on Sonnet by zodiac	zodiac 209.193.9.218	6-Feb-06/2:50 PM
There are several typical rhyme-schemes for sonnets, including Shakespearean, Petrarchan and so on. None of them are given much thought these days. The outstanding feature of a sonnet is that it has 14 lines. Most sonnets, almost all of them, in fact, are written in iambic pentameter (10 syllables, bu-BUMP bu-BUMP bu-BUMP bu-BUMP bu-BUMP.) But even that sees a lot of variation nowadays. American poet Nikki Giovanni made a big splash writing "broken sonnets", for example, which used several rhythms and line-lengths. It's not even, as far as I know, currently expected by most people that sonnets rhyme. This one does, of course: ABABCDdEdFGgFF
Re: a comment on An Understanding Woman by Dovina	zodiac 209.193.9.218	6-Feb-06/2:43 PM
Oh, like every night I get a different anatomical text with funny line-drawings in it, and your poem just happened to remind me of the plot of the one I was reading that night? The tv-show is spelled "Grey's", the text "Gray's". That is only one of several differences between the two.
Re: a comment on time (3rd draft) by Adriaan	Ranger 62.252.32.15	6-Feb-06/1:12 PM
Okay, I much prefer this version. The only thing from my view is that the second line's a syllable too long - I pronounce 'rippling' with 3 syllables. If you don't pronounce it that way, disregard what I've said, if you do then all I'd do is get rid of 'the'. Other than that, perfect!
Re: Sonnet by zodiac	Dovina 69.175.32.104	6-Feb-06/12:56 PM
The word "bored" spoils it. The last sentence can go, I think - leaves it more mysterious. Klar-ed???
Re: a comment on An Understanding Woman by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	6-Feb-06/12:49 PM
Not having a research team to provide all references to my chosen subject, catalogued and outloined, I must stick to other known things.
Re: a comment on An Understanding Woman by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	6-Feb-06/12:43 PM
I thought you meant Gray's Anatomy.
Re: Pendragon by ecargo	Dovina 69.175.32.104	6-Feb-06/12:38 PM
I waive my rights - tunic and cloak – simplistic and cliché. Whoever wrote those words had a grip on what matters. A descent poem.
Re: a comment on An Understanding Woman by Dovina	zodiac 209.193.9.218	6-Feb-06/12:38 PM
The range of things less-profound than "Code Black" includes all other known things. You are excused, but strongly encouraged to write your next poem about "Code Black", instead of just writing about Blacks.