Re: a comment on The Last of The Winds by emilyowey	emilyowey 24.166.6.82	16-Jun-06/2:31 PM
um thanks, but no thanks
Re: The Last of The Winds by emilyowey	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	16-Jun-06/1:22 PM
Too much repetition of words and phrases in this one. Makes the poem come off as monotonous. Let me show you: The last of the winds came today. A final push. Tomorrow we’ll hear what they’ve left us. It's message never closer. Look to the east, you can almost feel it on your cheek and to the west it holds you like a bed of fallen leaves. Did you feel the cold? It’s always worse than you remember. I would tell you I made it that way but you wouldn’t believe me. Not without all the things I'll never say. The last of the winds came today. They have not yet gone. It lingers like a sleep that’s not ready to surrender. A scent left on your shoulder by a heart so close to yours. The last of the winds takes a little of you with it. Leaves you empty and allows the possibility of fullness.
Re: a comment on The Last of The Winds by emilyowey	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	16-Jun-06/1:02 PM
"Make it more poetic!" You threw that one out just in case Zodiac might still be watching didn't you?
Re: a comment on Blessings by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	16-Jun-06/12:58 PM
Too bad it seems he'll never return. Maybe if we say his name 3 times like Beetlejuice...?
Re: a comment on Eenie Meenie Minie Moe by Edna Sweetlove	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	16-Jun-06/12:48 PM
Oh, I even backed these 2 comments up too.
Re: a comment on Eenie Meenie Minie Moe by Edna Sweetlove	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	16-Jun-06/12:45 PM
I copied and pasted my reply to MS Word so if she deletes it I'll just post it back up again. Her only recourse is to delete her reply too. Hey it's nice to see you back. I missed your goddess-like presence.
Re: a comment on 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	16-Jun-06/12:31 PM
Well said. If she's smart she won't even try you. Her best comeback will probably involve something along the lines of nit picking any minor grammar errors you've made and calling you something like dummy-head or something as out-dated as yankee. I mean when was the last time we heard yankee said without reference to the baseball team?
Re: Herencia Latina by Ranger	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.6	16-Jun-06/11:04 AM
Viole..I read as violin and violence, and Fire...I wonder which you meant. "Silence shatters, blooming from a dark-staved scroll Curving cries encircle this typhoon"...hmmm... I like the delving this asks of the reader...love all the layers. And..with all the rhyming, it would have been easy for this to have gone to crap...but you rhymed all over the place without it getting away from you...the rythm and placement of rhymes worked very well. Good job!
Re: a comment on Murder Phoenix Born (meta-villanelle) by Ranger	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.97.6	16-Jun-06/10:50 AM
chiselled bone would be too base, obvious and concrete,...? struggling to find the right word here... IMHO
Re: Murder Phoenix Born (meta-villanelle) by Ranger	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.6	16-Jun-06/10:40 AM
Oh...Oh my...this has to be one of my favorites. Hauntingly beautiful, and beautifully crafted. Lovely, lovely. All but the line: "Which would scatter like a broken stone" change that and you get my 10...keep it, and get a high 9 :) Have I ever told you I am in lust with your mind, at moments like this?
Re: The Devil's Carnival by Ranger	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.6	16-Jun-06/10:28 AM
Crashing down makes one think the ride crashed, in the end...which WOULD have taught all those nasty grinners a lesson...but doubt you meant to imply that there. Good job with this! I DO hate to see someone on a ride they thought they would like, only to become distressed...and to think some get their jollies from watching this unfold...disturbing; and well crafted in this piece.
Re: a comment on 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	lmp 141.154.134.3	16-Jun-06/8:49 AM
fuck you, pisslove. anyone who laughs at another person getting killed is a complete waste of matter. laugh at the bonehead who ordered them over there and refuses to bring them back no matter how badly his plan fails, but do not laugh at the guys who get killed on all sides of this debacle. the whole thing makes me so pissed off and you just drew attention to yourself (as you so intended). this attention you crave has now put you in the crosshairs of my fury so bear up, bitch. if you want to laugh at the US, go ahead. just remember that you'd probably be speaking german right now if we had not helped you lot out. guess maybe you're just sour because the USA is a reminder of another colony lost? yank this, you bloody pissant wanker.
Re: The Last of The Winds by emilyowey	Dovina 66.235.27.131	16-Jun-06/7:39 AM
You've got a great idea here. I'll say what they often say to me. Make it more poetic! Take these thoughts and form the words into pleasing and provocative lines.
Re: Ice by MacFrantic	Dovina 66.235.27.131	16-Jun-06/7:35 AM
I like this and relate to it, but can't say why. "Spending your luck" as is yours is mine to spend - alright, thought provoking. And to remember winter while pondering it in November is long-range thinking. And obstacles as "growing holes in my frozen face" - yep, I get that.
Re: a comment on Eenie Meenie Minie Moe by Edna Sweetlove	Dovina 66.235.27.131	16-Jun-06/7:26 AM
Is this the only excuse for an arguement left on dying Poemranker? If Edna did not routinely delete every response she can't smear with shit, I might get involved. This is ridiculous.
Re: a comment on Blessings by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 66.235.27.131	16-Jun-06/7:21 AM
DA's only been banged by a door post on the head while blundering through the simplest of responses to Poemranker comments.
Re: a comment on 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	16-Jun-06/7:14 AM
Good work indeed, Hassan. Some of his best work was done on London Subway trains and an omnibus, wouldn't you agree? Thank God Bush's bitch Blair sent enough redcoat butlers over there to wash the towelhead blood stains of those yankee uniforms of ours.
Re: a comment on Eenie Meenie Minie Moe by Edna Sweetlove	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	16-Jun-06/6:41 AM
Dear Sweet-love, I shall leave links verifying my hyphen is acceptable and that there is indeed a well known variation of the rhyme containing the word "nigger". http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/here-by -and- http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Eeny,_meeny,_miny,_moe (scroll down to the history section) PS. Starting a sentence with "And" while in the process of trying to nit-pick somebody's grammar is incredibly stupid. Jesus wept indeed.
Re: a comment on Blessings by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	16-Jun-06/6:15 AM
I'm sure DA's been banged by some of the biggest and the littlest of things make Amanda say "Oh God" ;D
Re: a comment on Blessings by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 66.235.27.131	15-Jun-06/8:01 PM
Well, I see, after a long absence that we're all back in form like goslings after a long-necked mother. This god / no-god debate is always fun and good for slander. Amanda finds God in the slightest natural change, while Dark Angel finds Him not even in the biggest of bangs. I think He's the lovliest entity I can imagine. Poemranker seems in the throws of death, like some great beast becoming extinct for lack of adaptation. And Edna Sourlove is no help. We need the rank smell of blood around this place.