Re: Dancing for dinner by fevriere	Ranger 86.131.51.9	8-Mar-07/2:04 AM
Top drawer stuff.
Re: Mirror by Quarton	Ranger 86.131.51.9	8-Mar-07/1:51 AM
I like the gentleness of this piece, if you could scratch out a couple of the cliched phrases and put a little more innovation into some lines (such as the last one) I'd enjoy this even more.
Re: A whole load of cunts by mr cunt	Ranger 86.131.51.9	8-Mar-07/1:43 AM
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA! You are hilarious! Those were ip addresses from my college system. -10- for making me cry with laughter.
Re: Quantum Reality by Quarton	Ranger 86.131.51.9	8-Mar-07/1:36 AM
Interesting read - in a few places it sounds more science textbook-y than poetic ('ever increasing complexity' etc.) I liked stanza 5 and its cosmic dance - perhaps a reference to Holst's Planets Suite would have been appropriate there? It's certainly a piece with some education behind it - I like that, but my failing is a short attention span. Maybe cutting it into two or three sections would make it easier for simpletons like myself to read in one sitting? Good poem though.
Re: a comment on Quantum Reality by Quarton	Ranger 86.131.51.9	8-Mar-07/1:28 AM
I'm reading Slaughterhouse Five at the moment, it has a lot to live up to as I thought The Sirens of Titan was awesome. Have you heard Al Stewart's song about the book? As for the deleted posts, you must be clicking on the red 'X' rather than the 'reply' button. We really should get nentwined to move that button somewhere less offensive...
Re: Rock and Roll by wilco	lrustagi 59.180.192.85	7-Mar-07/11:09 PM
nice personification...i think the whole stanza should not be reapeated considering the lyric as a whole is a short one...may be repeating one or two key lines would be better. The lyric makes its point clear in a motivated sense. good attempt.
Re: A Rendezvous by lrustagi	lrustagi 59.180.192.85	7-Mar-07/11:03 PM
as an afterthought, i suppose "Sleepless" might be a better title...the readers pls. also suggest an apt title .
Re: Mirror by Quarton	Quarton 12.206.226.220	7-Mar-07/8:14 PM
Thank you.
Re: A Reflective Window by lukehanney	mr cunt 85.210.200.211	7-Mar-07/3:50 PM
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Re: Luke Hanney's 43rd Dream by lukehanney	mr cunt 85.210.200.211	7-Mar-07/3:49 PM
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Re: Take that thing off your head by lukehanney	mr cunt 85.210.200.211	7-Mar-07/3:49 PM
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Re: cold war by Dental Panic	Quarton 12.206.226.220	6-Mar-07/1:44 PM
Interesting comment regarding the "conveyor belt." The warming of the earth causing the breakdown of these natural currents which, paradoxically, leads to an overall cooling event. Kind of damned if you do and damned if you don't. Regardless, we are in big trouble with little or no acknowledgement by our president and the multi-national corporations which are in control. Profit at any price and damn the coonsequences mentality. Go Gore! Oh, almost forgot. Great poem.
Re: The Medium of Dunce by Ranger	Quarton 12.206.226.220	6-Mar-07/12:30 PM
Damn, this is good! I like the rhyme scheme which is unforced and adds to the read and flow. How about a 10 plus.
Re: Quantum Reality by Quarton	Quarton 12.206.226.220	6-Mar-07/11:37 AM
Dovina--Yeah, it does wander but so does my mind. It also wonders in regard to science, cosmology and quantum mechanics. Rather esoteric stuff and I suspect even the theoretical physicists are unable to unerstand on an intellectual level. Ineffable is descriptive of this enigma. Regardless, we are all connected despite the illusion of separateness.
Re: a comment on Out of this crowd a mistress or a friend by Prince of Void	Prince of Void 80.71.122.112	6-Mar-07/11:33 AM
Cunt I'm happy to see u again may I call u the taste of heaven or the bitterness of man's weakness I can smell you,cunt you are all around here in this cybernetic wasteland I know in your life You have had many visitors from ur experiences that you have visited by strangers and friends these are nonesense as regards your cunt
Re: Quantum Reality by Quarton	Quarton 12.206.226.220	6-Mar-07/11:20 AM
Thanks for the comments. I love Vonnegut and the movie version of Slaughterhouse Five is one of my favorites. It is a "must see" in my opinion and is almost a cult movie as Billy Pilgrim becomes unstuck in time. I am curious. What is the other half? Also, your post was deleted and I am not sure why. Any suggestions as this has happened several times?
Re: a comment on cold war by Dental Panic	Dental Panic 84.27.244.4	6-Mar-07/2:31 AM
You're right. No need to rub it in. I'll drop the last line.
Re: cold war by Dental Panic	half.italian 76.172.249.205	5-Mar-07/9:06 AM
I think you could stay with the analogy through the last line. Don't give it to us. I got it right away. Nice poem.
Re: her love fading in the haze by Prince of Void	mr cunt 85.210.220.79	5-Mar-07/3:17 AM
So bad, I feel physically ill.
Re: THE MISSING HEART by Prince of Void	mr cunt 85.210.220.79	5-Mar-07/3:16 AM
I LAUGHED SO LONG AND LOUDLY THAT I PISSED MY PANTS! TOTAL POMPOUS RUBBISH! I SHALL ADD YOU TO ME "CUNTS" LIST.