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cold war (Free verse) by Dental Panic gravity expressed itself
in its most lyrical form
and before the gutter could suck it all up
they showed up in the hood:
snowman makers
carrying shovels & spades
& portable phones &
within half a day or so
next to every pole there rose
a blind white giant with a stonecold grin
waiting for its picture to be
taken â a perfect target
for the snowball insurgents:
a massacre! even though a few
stood their ground
for quite a while
Up the ladder:
Jerusalem the Golden
Down the ladder:
HELLO
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Posted: March 5, 2007 7:46 AM PST; Last modified: March 6, 2007 2:40 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.237129 Overall Rank: 4151 Comments:
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half.italian @ 76.172.249.205
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5-Mar-07/9:06 AM
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I think you could stay with the analogy through the last line. Don't give it to us. I got it right away. Nice poem.
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Dental Panic @ 84.27.244.4
> half.italian
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6-Mar-07/2:31 AM
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You're right. No need to rub it in. I'll drop the last line.
Interesting comment regarding the "conveyor belt." The warming of the earth causing the breakdown of these natural currents which, paradoxically, leads to an overall cooling event. Kind of damned if you do and damned if you don't. Regardless, we are in big trouble with little or no acknowledgement by our president and the multi-national corporations which are in control. Profit at any price and damn the coonsequences mentality. Go Gore! Oh, almost forgot. Great poem.
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