Re: 1765: The Coventry Hangings by Caducus	Caducus 88.108.37.117	5-Sep-07/5:26 AM
Pippin and cofa are indiginous trees of coventry 'cofa tree' was where coventry derived. After these hangings they were treated to a coating of hot tar and left to rot for 35 years - Coventry justice has never been the same since lol.
Re: 1765: The Coventry Hangings by Caducus	Caducus 88.108.37.117	5-Sep-07/5:27 AM
oh and 'coventry blue' was the colour renowned that coventry weavers produced until the early 20th century.
Re: floored by godspeed	godspeed 81.151.114.183	5-Sep-07/11:20 AM
This is a true story. True. I'm not sure whose, though
Re: floored by godspeed	richa 82.2.211.159	5-Sep-07/12:19 PM
Poo does not coagulate. What are you some kind of dunce.
Re: Come Now by Joi	richa 82.2.211.159	5-Sep-07/12:22 PM
Better than your last. Still a lot of you repeating yourself to no particular effect. Also numb is a terrible word choice in a poem by a grownup.
Re: NIGHTMILK SUNBLOOD by horus8	hobojo 71.198.25.165	5-Sep-07/5:19 PM
In all of my artistic endeavors, art, music, cooking, and writing, I do so for myself. It is an outlet, it cleanses my emotions, it teaches me something new, and it results in a creation. If someone else enjoys and benefits, wonderful. Ignore him. I enjoyed this more than most of what I have read on this site.
regarding some deleted poem...	godspeed 81.151.114.183	7-Sep-07/11:30 AM
'crippled face' doesn't work. A face can't be crippled because it never had any limbs and/or could never walk in the first place. What are you? Some kind of dunce?
Re: manifesto by malpaso	malpaso 68.240.124.35	8-Sep-07/5:11 PM
thanks, rock!!!!
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 65.29.52.204	9-Sep-07/7:05 AM
Ya know mage, if you added a vein somehow, it would deepen the poem I think.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 65.29.52.204	9-Sep-07/7:13 AM
Paul, I really like -white walls of hope and salvation- There's a little trimming, not much, but some change in the line breaks could help. Would you like me to show you ?
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 65.29.52.204	9-Sep-07/4:29 PM
Try these cuts. the weight, of bones, the second -where- and change the third to an -and. Use the line break as a type of comma, for instance: Surrounded by apple faced children swinging lunch pails bent like the aged under heavy backpacks, So you're still speaking the poem but misdirecting, slightly, each line. Line breaks make for a kind of two-fer for the reader. Not that I have l/bs all worked out, but i've found it's something to play with, if you will. Remember, You have the final say. Thanks for listening.
regarding some deleted poem...	pete 62.56.88.175	9-Sep-07/6:00 PM
good
Re: If David Biespiel Wrote A Haiku by Aetius	pete 62.56.88.175	9-Sep-07/6:02 PM
sol (smiled out loud)
Re: Eye's Upon Tomorrow's Night by Enkidu	some deleted user 63.127.193.79	10-Sep-07/3:54 AM
Some decent lines here--good work.
Re: My No-Good Graces by D. $ Fontera	some deleted user 63.127.193.79	10-Sep-07/3:58 AM
I like the rhythm and rhyme scheme of this. nicely done.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 63.127.193.79	10-Sep-07/4:01 AM
The last line is top-notch.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 63.127.193.79	10-Sep-07/4:05 AM
Should'nt it be "You've never seen the things I've done?" Just an observation.
Re: Baggage (3rd ending) by INTRANSIT	SupremeDreamer 130.65.109.102	10-Sep-07/2:10 PM
Humorous.
Re: Come Now by Joi	SupremeDreamer 130.65.109.102	10-Sep-07/2:29 PM
Soon to be parodied. And trust me, it will be VULGAR and fantastically TASTELESS.
Re: Eye's Upon Tomorrow's Night by Enkidu	INTRANSIT 65.29.52.204	10-Sep-07/7:15 PM
S-2 is where it begins to roll.