wow

i thought this was cool, who gave this a one, that's total bs, yeah some people hate rhymes, but this had some substance and connection to the every day person who feels trapped...i hoped i spelled rhyme right.

Absolutely oustanding for someone more partial to the absence of rhyme, as it seems. *10* Probably the best limerick on here, save the comma on line two which is just annoying enough.

Could be said more effectively in half the words.

wow. care for a cigarette?

i wanted to give her my colon

I was expecting some dribble here about love and falling and you know that annoying crap, but wow, not even...

Very funny. Most of you want to give, or rather lend, other parts. How selfish we are to want it all, or just a heart.

I normally hate anything that has ventricle in the title, but...

truly, you are the devil. what about gluttony? brutal and swift -- like the Horsemen. like it

you sir, are the devil. what about gluttony? swift and brutal -- like the horsemen - 8 -

Lovely! Great visual poem! Way to paint a picture with words! =-)

the way you write makes me feel as if i were observing it and living it at the same time -10-

Nice rhythm. If I may ask, is there a reason "lie" is not capitalized? Typo? Just curious. =-) 

great poem, i like this more than ur others, seems to be of a better mood, -9-

i know this sounds dumb, but i like how you said it, i just don't like the subject, i wish there was a subjective vote and an objective vote...

that was rad!!!

i seem to only vote on things i like, a fear of being mean of telling someone no...well this doesn't have much to do with your poem, but i love the whole brando going to the moon type thing...

i liked this, i love the whole dot thing, the "dan" "fan" "plan" thing, the whole trying to describe going beyond self, that's always positive.

but you can kill a dead man, as long as he's talking...yes i have an aversion to the caps button and i'm a uh three dot whore, it's got some kind of name within the whole grammar thing, but its late and stuff so...