some deleted user
on some deleted poem
8 Oct 2004, 8:21 AM
Ending is weak. Opening sets the example.
Heh, Peach fuzz.
As Samantha, I ignore them. As Steven, I'd have to act macho with a joke.
A really good thought you have here. It could be said stronger with fewer words though.
http://www.reuters.com/newsArticle.jhtml?type=oddlyEnoughNews&;storyID=6452056&src=rss/oddlyEnoughNews§ion=news
This though, is fucking a riot, -=10=-
This however, is a smoking turd popping corn.
<{Baba^Yaga}>
on On the Discovery of Bacchus and Lovely Clothespins by MacFrantic
8 Oct 2004, 2:50 AM
Swit
Please...
Oh GOD!
Welcome to the world. I can't believe you'd do anything worth getting yelled at tho'. Good expression/vent.
Nothing like a nice hot shower huh?
A very poor, and needlessly rude example of poetry. I will admit that clerihews are not known for quality, but for wit. However, this is just rude.
By the way Nicholas Jones = Legend.
Nicholas Jones = Legend
Subject to the but of my poetry and took it all very well... if you don't mind Nicholas I'm working on Ode No. 4
http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j
I really liked it. Good job. The last line of the chorus didn't flow right for me though, but that's just my opinion.
3rd line needs an "r" on "you"
Excellent, there can be no more fitting tribute to the poet or indeed welshness than rhyming Jones with trombone.
A can of spank
:(
Overall, a really good poem. I especially liked the lines, "A memory was carved from oaks, where spiders weaved silk lairs" The last stanza was good too.