10/10 Ilove this sort of peom.

So vivid I can smell the saltwater. The crab looked alive, but was actually dead. The lifelike floating legs and protruding passive eyes surveying all - kind of creepy, yet thought provoking!

Your Spanish has gotten much, much worse. PS-Your Spanish poems are even more banal than your English ones - somewhat surprisingly, since your English poems are banal times infinity.

I loved the beginning, by the end though? I was like good christ. Women are so fucking co-dependant, blah.

I'm a pinched hitter.

Dream on and on . . .

Not your best. Too many words. Good thought though.

I've been reading Larkin lately and this one reminded me a bit of toads revisited. The whole poem to me is very polished and focused. One of the best seasonal poems I've read in a while.

You've given these dead loco's the kiss of life here and mucho respect for not dragging on too long with it. Lines 6/7 are can be explored further i feel, the greatness of of something now rusting away as fields bloom before them.

S4 L1 lose: please S5 L2 lose : ever so S4 L4 can we change tears down my face they would obviously be on your face. There is potential in here and it just needs a tweak or 3, The opening is good but the last 4 lines limp. Woven shield is lovely.

Anyone who can successfully utilize rhyming insertion and person deserves a pat on the back. I hope people dont just look at this as a laugh as to me there seemed something more.

Line 2 reeks class.

Drop so from last line. Strong opening loved lines 1/2 2nd parts weakens the poem because it builds rather than capitalizes. Pretty good but it seemed rushed in parts

Lose the message in brackets - fuck it the rest is refreshingly original so for that ___7

Too good for a pimple too inconsistent in quality for a poem, the idea of being feasted upon could be elaborated on sooner as the end is the strongest part but by then i lost interest. Not bad - not good. 5

moving on up.

I like the ' patiently', but the rest of it doesn't do much for me. Sorry.

A nice description of the crab, except for "too too solid flesh." I'm trying to see it as a metaphor. Wish I could.

I don't know what was wrong with Sasha and DA. Whatever it is, just keep on writing.. based on your feelings or not. You can't please everybody but obviously, this one does it for me. (",)

Try a spell checker. Some good thoughts here. Suicide is selfish and unkind!