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*tear I've Now this is SHIT. Absolute shit. I thought this was a poem, not your typical NA pamplet or state sponsored BULLSHIT. With all this drug abuse, you couldn't delude yourself into being "creative"? Or is this what you call the apex of creativity for you?

Crap.

is this it....very good i must say

thanks......I think

It's gorgeous. Seems more personal than just a story about a lost love. There are undercurrents that I see clearly but don't understand. Fabulous!

it was an accident...sorry

for all you carl jung people raven = shadow pluto = soul as that is the only reason I have used egar allen poe's poetry like this.... for that symbolism

hey all you.... ever heard metallica unforgiven2? Hopefully, so cut me some slack iam dealing with a SAME soul mate here.... sheesh :)

I would suggest trying to take out 90% of the "he"s in the poem. Each time, try to find a different way to approach the line/stanza. For example: """ He takes off, exhilarated. Cutting wind with feathery knives only to rest after exhausting the morning's meal. """ The above is not quite right, but you can see what I'm getting at. Try to add more variation. Another thing. Usually you can find a better approach to emphasize a phrase without using punctuation. Instead of putting a word in CAPS, make the description (in lowercase) strong enough to evoke the emotion you want without caps. Good poem! ~half.italian

I don't understand this poem, but I like it. It has a uniqueness and a lyrical quality that makes it stand out from the crowd. Good work!

Sorry, I forgto to vote.

that was a remarkable poem At once I read it it was gentle and plain unwavering under whose cautious hand against the the known intention in any hand it was full of feelings that flow from line to another to form the shape in the breast of the man

great political poem, i really have nothing negative to say about the poem itself, very lyrical and memorable, from the seagulls to the seeds to the chosen people. i disagree completely with the premise, however. There are many, many, many arab countries, and only one Israel. The great irony is that the two sides in conflict have much more in common with each other than with any of the outside forces, both arab and western, all of whom want to manipulate the situation for their own gain, not to help the innocents caught in the middle.

Geeku!!! Geekliscious.

Oh - My - Fucking - God... You are so fucking emo that it makes me want to barf... just go ahead and kill yourself you pathetic fuck. PLEASE????

You suck emo boy... maybe that's what she got tired of, you know, the unstable sensitivity? EH? Maybe she wanted a guy with like, balls? Yeah, a tougher sort of guy who won't cry and be gentle when he fucks her. The sort of guy who'll grab her ass in a rough manner and ram his rod with a viciousness to match her wanting while talking dirty, calling her a little fucking WHORE.

Shut up and slit your wrists already, loser.

Idealistic Emo Goo is what killed your relationship, you sad little bitch boi!!! Now stop loving and go masturbate with a razor.