Re: Go Ahead by misused	daggatolar 41.219.236.75	22-Apr-08/9:01 AM
Mom please don't heed this poem don,t go ahead anymore.
regarding some deleted poem...	vulcan 91.184.73.128	22-Apr-08/10:47 PM
powerful one!
Re: On Youth Revisited by vulcan	Dan garcia-Black 69.238.211.228	26-Apr-08/12:23 AM
My new face is...younger than before...a chaos Of Nightingales and flow'rs. Yeah. Works for me.
Re: wam bam by malpaso	Dan garcia-Black 69.238.211.228	26-Apr-08/12:29 AM
Are you calling the USA a bottom? Vaseline (another petroleum product)will break the condom. Better to use butt-er.
Re: look upon my works by nentwined	Dan garcia-Black 69.238.211.228	26-Apr-08/12:33 AM
Quote the maven, "Nevermore!"
Re: People write funny things by Garrett S Sexton	Dan garcia-Black 69.238.211.228	26-Apr-08/12:38 AM
Puddles of bloody poodles could be a follow-up.
Re: I had no idea it could be so good by A. Nomaly	jessicazee 24.160.246.73	28-Apr-08/9:36 PM
This might be better in 4 lines: circumstance and one gone away in the next room, zebra stripped, cat for a dream and some Taurus, blank or I don't know. I liked it so much I re-typed it. 9. Don't you miss the loudness of the electric typrwriter?
regarding some deleted poem...	jessicazee 24.160.246.73	28-Apr-08/9:39 PM
I'm impressed, and read this 3 times, liking it better every time. That 2nd stanza two-line opening is stunning, the yolk to the albumen of this poem. Thanks for posting, and the backstory must be epic.
Re: I had no idea it could be so good by A. Nomaly	Dental Panic 87.209.75.3	29-Apr-08/1:19 AM
I like it too. Great works on your homepage.
Re: On Youth Revisited by vulcan	SupremeDreamer 69.236.82.255	29-Apr-08/3:16 AM
No.
Re: ADDICTION by kristie24	SupremeDreamer 69.236.82.255	29-Apr-08/3:19 AM
*tear I've Now this is SHIT. Absolute shit. I thought this was a poem, not your typical NA pamplet or state sponsored BULLSHIT. With all this drug abuse, you couldn't delude yourself into being "creative"? Or is this what you call the apex of creativity for you?
Re: Explain him by misused	SupremeDreamer 69.236.82.255	29-Apr-08/3:23 AM
Crap.
Re: Sunset by Aetius	little_angel_maria 201.201.28.2	1-May-08/6:49 PM
is this it....very good i must say
Re: wam bam by malpaso	malpaso 70.233.147.84	2-May-08/7:44 AM
thanks......I think
regarding some deleted poem...	half.italian 76.172.228.248	2-May-08/9:38 PM
It's gorgeous. Seems more personal than just a story about a lost love. There are undercurrents that I see clearly but don't understand. Fabulous!
Re: wam bam by malpaso	malpaso 70.233.147.84	3-May-08/6:27 AM
it was an accident...sorry
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 66.141.118.95	3-May-08/11:42 PM
for all you carl jung people raven = shadow pluto = soul as that is the only reason I have used egar allen poe's poetry like this.... for that symbolism
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 66.141.118.95	4-May-08/12:14 AM
hey all you.... ever heard metallica unforgiven2? Hopefully, so cut me some slack iam dealing with a SAME soul mate here.... sheesh :)
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 79.72.218.188	4-May-08/2:29 AM
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Re: On Clipped Wings by Viirin	half.italian 76.172.228.248	4-May-08/8:31 PM
I would suggest trying to take out 90% of the "he"s in the poem. Each time, try to find a different way to approach the line/stanza. For example: """ He takes off, exhilarated. Cutting wind with feathery knives only to rest after exhausting the morning's meal. """ The above is not quite right, but you can see what I'm getting at. Try to add more variation. Another thing. Usually you can find a better approach to emphasize a phrase without using punctuation. Instead of putting a word in CAPS, make the description (in lowercase) strong enough to evoke the emotion you want without caps. Good poem! ~half.italian