| Re: yet another what if poem by shadows |
Crakyamuni 131.252.231.192 |
27-May-05/10:56 AM |
|
I'm still laughing about the name lintyweenis!
ok ok sorry. Happiness is a warm something.
thats it.
|
|
|
 |
| Re: yet another what if poem by shadows |
Crakyamuni 131.252.231.192 |
27-May-05/10:57 AM |
|
|
|
| regarding some deleted poem... |
INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67 |
27-May-05/11:49 AM |
|
Look up: On concerning loving onesself by D-G-B. enjoy.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Utensils of creation by Damien |
some deleted user 81.69.23.196 |
27-May-05/4:55 PM |
|
Yes, this is how a politician would do a poem. With hollow words, but lots of them.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Aimee by LintyWeenis |
Dovina 12.72.11.31 |
27-May-05/4:56 PM |
|
Title is great; wish you'd done more with it. Leave out "It is".
|
|
|
|
| Re: Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
Dovina 12.72.11.31 |
27-May-05/4:59 PM |
|
I feel really sad you got no response on this other than mine. I have an ace response in mind, waiting for time and inclination.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Last Night by Roisin |
Dovina 12.72.11.31 |
27-May-05/5:02 PM |
|
This is really good. I'm with you all the way. The start of verse 3 is weak.
|
|
|
|
| Re: The secret press by zodiac |
some deleted user 81.69.23.196 |
28-May-05/11:19 AM |
|
Yeah, great. A pity it isn't poetry.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Inspiration from absurdity by INTRANSIT |
some deleted user 81.69.23.196 |
28-May-05/11:25 AM |
|
It's like you said yourself Intransit: just some junk. There is hardly a story, while it suggests there is one, and what there is, is badly told.
There is so much more to be made out of this.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Aimee by LintyWeenis |
LintyWeenis 152.163.100.135 |
28-May-05/3:18 PM |
|
I wasn't sure what to do with the title. I wrote it about her, so I saw it fitting.
Thanks for the tips :)
|
|
|
|
| Re: The secret press by zodiac |
Dental Panic 84.31.86.195 |
28-May-05/5:39 PM |
|
I think it's poetry. Like the way the spin-wringer resonates through the stanzas. Doctrines and doctrines.
|
|
|
|
| regarding some deleted poem... |
patty t 69.194.110.163 |
28-May-05/7:19 PM |
|
you poor thing.
I like your economy.
|
|
|
|
| regarding some deleted poem... |
patty t 69.194.110.163 |
28-May-05/7:22 PM |
|
'depilated' doesn't fit.
I like it.
|
|
|
|
| Re: The secret press by zodiac |
INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67 |
28-May-05/7:59 PM |
|
Because Beta usually follows alpha or precedes -max, I have problem here. If it is an actual name for fact keeping purposes, then ignore this. When you said navel I thought she might be pregnant which would have worked as well but I didn't write it and there's nothing wrong with your choice.
If I was female, I'd be wrung. Metrics all the way.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Crossroads by hobojo |
some deleted user 81.69.23.196 |
28-May-05/8:47 PM |
|
Funny. This view on insecurity is narrated in a too self-assured tone...
|
|
|
|
| regarding some deleted poem... |
some deleted user 81.69.23.196 |
28-May-05/8:58 PM |
|
In fits and starts rather humorous.
<< it is a dogâs life and
we are the husbands
the wives
...
s'better to remain a-doggal
not suffer to be their slaves >>
These do not quite work.
|
|
|
|
| regarding some deleted poem... |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.154.163.157 |
29-May-05/5:22 AM |
|
It's an old truism, but if punctuality is a virtue then tardiness is an aganram of t-sardines :(
|
|
|
|
| regarding some deleted poem... |
xxx 68.164.242.151 |
29-May-05/7:33 AM |
|
You are not serious! This is more laundry list than anything...
|
|
|
|
| regarding some deleted poem... |
xxx 68.164.242.151 |
29-May-05/7:36 AM |
|
|
|
| regarding some deleted poem... |
xxx 68.164.242.151 |
29-May-05/7:38 AM |
|
There is not enough character given to your oil pump.
|
|
|
|
