| Re: Family by Sunshine Conkey |
Blue Magpie 212.205.251.47 |
23-Jun-05/11:42 PM |
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'common courtesy you use' transposed verbs are really a sign that the poet hasn't put in the required effort, as BWC said a few poems up, it makes one of Yoda think.
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| Re: A Father's Day Late by meek_little_braggart |
Blue Magpie 212.205.251.47 |
23-Jun-05/11:45 PM |
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I would name it just a rhyme
if it were somehow one of mine.
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| Re: How Well I See by Blue Magpie |
Dovina 69.175.32.185 |
24-Jun-05/5:45 AM |
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It's difficult to handle an issue like this effectively in a form like this, but I think you've done well.
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| Re: A Righteous Prayer by Dovina |
jroday 204.215.33.83 |
24-Jun-05/6:26 AM |
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I feel like she has thanked God for all his blessing,
and she is pleading with him not in prayer, but in faith.
All she is asking God is to keep her strong in her faith, because she does'nt want to go back to those evil ways.
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| Re: Family by Sunshine Conkey |
zodiac 212.118.19.91 |
24-Jun-05/6:56 AM |
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Do you think if you were more polite to your sons, they'd stop being self-obsessed Neo-Nazis?
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| Re: A Righteous Prayer by Dovina |
zodiac 212.118.19.91 |
24-Jun-05/7:00 AM |
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Some of this grammar is a mess. In special need of changing:
"Grant now my petitions For which I make claim"
"All those lofty ideals Iâve kept With passion for religion As tools for advancement"
"As Your Word admonishes I now beseech"
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| Re: Family by Sunshine Conkey |
Sunshine Conkey 216.67.193.198 |
24-Jun-05/8:01 AM |
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All 4 of my sons are wonderful. The oldest is 21 and has been in IRAQ since March, the youngest is 10.
They have done & will do things that I don't agree with just as I have done things that they don't agree with, bu I have never called them "self-obsessed Neo-Nazis"
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| Re: How Well I See by Blue Magpie |
Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.130.8.12 |
24-Jun-05/11:48 AM |
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there is no "I" in team, but there is an "I" in Meatpie.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254 |
24-Jun-05/2:04 PM |
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Flop-o-Rama! Need I score more?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254 |
24-Jun-05/2:08 PM |
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Yah. Needs another stanza to clue us in just a little more. Readjustment from container living must be hard. I now have some O'Hara with me. Can I have the combination please? He's giving me fits.
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some deleted user 81.69.23.196 |
24-Jun-05/2:18 PM |
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The funny thing is; I tried to write a good Awful Love Poem. It turned out an awful Good Love Poem.
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| Re: Yard Birds by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk |
INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254 |
24-Jun-05/2:20 PM |
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Funny. And excellent. And true.
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| Re: Flicking by INTRANSIT |
Caducus 81.131.161.53 |
24-Jun-05/5:13 PM |
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| Re: Emotionally Unavailable by horus8 |
cpill 81.179.102.177 |
24-Jun-05/6:58 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Dovina 69.175.32.185 |
24-Jun-05/7:59 PM |
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Funny. More commas would help, like after "shits" in the second line. And "beercans"? well, drop it.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
some deleted user 81.69.23.196 |
24-Jun-05/8:39 PM |
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Here's a link for a view on the 'artful' treatment.
http://raarlemsdagklad.web-log.nl/log/2761598
I admit, it's a rather poor Stonehenge... I just learned that more damage was done to it in 1995, by arsoning. It's a nice example of contemporary man, getting his kicks; destroy, destroy, destroy.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Blue Magpie 212.205.251.23 |
24-Jun-05/11:13 PM |
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| Re: cup-cake by cpill |
Blue Magpie 212.205.251.23 |
24-Jun-05/11:15 PM |
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Not anything I can enjoy, sorry.
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| Re: Eagle by Mr Pig |
Blue Magpie 212.205.251.23 |
24-Jun-05/11:17 PM |
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Actually eagles try not to shadow over prey until after they have got their talons into it because the shadow is a warning to the prey.
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| Re: FAT BALLET- PAS DE DEUX by andrew barnes |
Dovina 69.175.32.185 |
25-Jun-05/7:16 AM |
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Good, except for long-limbed pulley.
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