Lenore
on a.m. by oneglove
11 Jul 2005, 7:41 PM
Shades of Freddy Krueger
This is crap.
After reading the first line, I though 'ugh'. Not a good start, almost made me run.
I am glad I didn't because the rest is clever and serrated. I wanna be sedated.
I have decided to become the anti-cockmage, and vote 10 on every single poeme on the site.
But then I thought, no. I can't be arsed.
I decided to become the anti-cockphage, and vote 10 on every single poeme on the site.
But then I thought, no. I can't be arsed.
no no no
nice positive emotions.
a good read.
Who can say what they feel? I think this might sum it up as well as any. Might want to capitalize You.
pretty
This was kind of good whe I read it real fast.
not pretty
bad
better.
uh, ok.
and no
I like this too. But "even more sublime" implies that the former is also sublime.
COCK!
really, remove the exclamation point at the end, and replace it with 'like a cock' and you got yerself a top 10 poemranker hit.
oh, man...sheesh...okay...yeah...got me in the gut....Very good...very good indeed. First read tonight..sheesh.
Wow, this is wild...I like the night, the dark, the moon...I like the wildness of night breezes, and shifting clouds. But I suspect you speak of another kind of darkness, here. Yes, the sun...they say it is nearly as affective as meds, for depression. I love the ending line. Abrupt. nice job.
oh, dang...it was going along so well, and then the last four lines..ugh! also, >"Itâs to bad I canât think", should be TOO. I would be perfectly happy if you just dropped the last four lines...then I could give you a decent score...either that, or do something else with the ending.