regarding some deleted poem...	MacFrantic 71.208.115.199	1-Jul-06/9:39 AM
This is just a great allegory and nothing less, bravo *10*
regarding some deleted poem...	MacFrantic 71.208.115.199	1-Jul-06/9:40 AM
A+ ending good sir *10*
regarding some deleted poem...	MacFrantic 71.208.115.199	1-Jul-06/9:42 AM
AHAHAHA glorious! Well done, another *10*
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 81.158.154.112	1-Jul-06/8:49 PM
Actually I thought this was hilarious. Returning to the car/drive/gas was good. Typo line 11. A lot more people are coming round to the realisation that global warming is inevitable. Also, the last I read was that the rainforests actually contribute about 30% of all methane emissions into the atmosphere; methane being more detrimental than CO2 if my science is correct.
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 81.158.154.112	1-Jul-06/8:53 PM
Superb. Read Empson's commentary on Paradise Lost. You'll take great glee in the complete reversal of meaning placed on Milton's work.
Re: Goliath by amanda_dcosta	Ranger 81.158.154.112	1-Jul-06/9:15 PM
Good questions, excellent take on Goliath. It's pretty ironic that the laziness fights so much...I think of it more like a dead weight against which we struggle. The only thing I'd really change here is removing the exclamation mark at the end...they rarely appeal to me in poetry. Others may, of course, disagree.
Re: canada day by Bill Z Bub	Ranger 81.158.154.112	1-Jul-06/9:29 PM
This is magic. I don't get why, though. Maybe it's the spacing, the openness like the sky. I think that's why I want the last word to be 'plain'. Three more lines of description after 'darkest sky' would seem right, somehow. Do you listen to Arrogant Worms? This made me think of their self-penned national anthem, 'Canada Is Really Big'...
Re: Sonnet IX by tuthaliash	Ranger 81.158.154.112	1-Jul-06/9:39 PM
Where the hell did this one come from? Superbly archaic in format and technique. Therefore it meets with approval. Only complaint is "Rehash'd"...it just doesn't sound like an old enough word for the piece. Excellent meter.
Re: Goliath by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	2-Jul-06/1:39 AM
This poem remind me of a painting by Goya: http://www.pkimaging.com/pic/mikp/art/goya.colossus.jpg and a lithograph by Goya: http://www.artchive.com/artchive/g/goya/giant.jpg Good take on the Goliath theme.
Re: Southern Baptist Redneck Song by Edna Sweetlove	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 86.137.88.190	2-Jul-06/4:29 AM
What biting satire! I wish I had your talent for picking out such original targets for ridicule. Southern, Bible-bashing rednecks -- it's about time someone took them down a peg or two. It must take a lot of courage to be so controversial. -10-
Re: Goliath by amanda_dcosta	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 86.137.88.190	2-Jul-06/7:18 AM
Yeah good analogy. Goliath is big, bad and scary. Lets use him as a metaphor for all the big, bad, scary things in life.
Re: 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 86.137.88.190	2-Jul-06/7:29 AM
I'd be more worried about the 72 mothers-in-law.
Re: Memories of modernism by madamefrufru	ecargo 63.22.18.184	2-Jul-06/12:11 PM
Nice mix of remembered detail and the uncertainty wrought by time/distance. I don't think "grandeous" is a word. Maybe you were just sticky. ;)
Re: moving on by Jigg	ecargo 63.22.18.184	2-Jul-06/12:14 PM
I think you contort the words to fit the rhymes a little too much, particularly the last line.
Re: Lovers east of the Coombe by Caducus	ecargo 63.22.18.184	2-Jul-06/12:17 PM
The melancholy of this overcomes the limerick rhythm--it shouldn't work, but it does. Last stanza's my favorite.
Re: Doctoring Stigmata by thepinkbunnyofdoom	ecargo 63.22.18.184	2-Jul-06/12:21 PM
I really like this, bunny--it's got heart and honesty. Moves along well too--I like the gunslinger image, it fits the hankering after adventure and romance; you could have taken it even further, I think (maybe that's another poem).
Re: canada day by Bill Z Bub	ecargo 63.22.18.184	2-Jul-06/12:35 PM
You're alive! Hiya Mr. Bub. Good to see you.
regarding some deleted poem...	ecargo 63.22.18.184	2-Jul-06/12:38 PM
Not bad--you tell it well. The sentiments are awfully familiar, and "eyes wide shut" has been forever tarnished by its association with Tom (Crazy!) and Nicole, but you've got a sort of country-song cadence and feel to this that works.
regarding some deleted poem...	ecargo 63.22.18.184	2-Jul-06/12:42 PM
Good smokes chain poets. It's pretty funny. And I consider myself a "high-art aficionado"--go figure.
Re: Goliath by amanda_dcosta	ecargo 63.22.18.184	2-Jul-06/12:46 PM
I like the beginning a lot--"gnashing your teeth and spitting out curses." Good stuff. I like the metaphor aspects the best--you lose me a bit when you make it so explicit what "goliath" is (you don't give us a chance to figure it out ourselves).