Re: Dying Abroad by zodiac	Ranger 86.142.241.175	5-Sep-06/11:51 PM
Unbelievably good. 'Slip sibilant...' - reference to the sound of crickets? I thought it worked well. But then again, so did the rest of the piece.
Re: A Night By The Shore by Bhaskaryya	Ranger 86.142.241.175	5-Sep-06/11:55 PM
Superb, another favourite :-D
Re: Dying Abroad by zodiac	Niphredil 132.69.238.35	6-Sep-06/9:36 AM
Fantastic. This goes on my fave list. I re-read it to myself just so I could hear the rhythm out loud.
regarding some deleted poem...	ALChemy 71.75.188.163	6-Sep-06/11:43 AM
Southpark
Re: Dying Abroad by zodiac	ALChemy 71.75.188.163	6-Sep-06/12:00 PM
"fractious day" reminds me of Jabberwocky. "Slip sibilant over the fields" doesn't really make sense but "Slip over the sibilant fields" would. The whole poem makes me think of the death scene at the end of Gladiator.
Re: Exposing Anne Frank by Caducus	ALChemy 71.75.188.163	6-Sep-06/12:10 PM
Are you Dan Brown?
Re: Flour by MacFrantic	Dovina 12.72.42.240	6-Sep-06/2:59 PM
Yeah, I've been to those headstones, and seen that flour on her face. I've felt a mind crwoded with those thoughts. But I think the funky line ends and punctuation are attempst to shourd the impossible thing to say in poetic mystery, and it's easily seen through.
Re: Small Teeth in a Glass Bowl by Fear of Garbage	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.217.159	6-Sep-06/7:14 PM
I love a dental stump up my bumhole
Re: A Fucking Kinky Homecoming by Edna Sweetlove	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.217.159	6-Sep-06/7:19 PM
THIS IS MY FUCKING BEST POEM. EVER. ANYONE WHO THINKS OTHERWISE IS AN ANUS. I ONLY WANT 10/10 - ALL OTHERS GO SUCK.
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 86.131.55.205	7-Sep-06/1:13 PM
Funny, in many senses of the word...
Re: Chronicles of a wannabe chav by Mr Pig	Ranger 86.131.55.205	7-Sep-06/1:17 PM
Oh, mister P, once again you give us an amusing reflection on modern life. If only this could be turned into a full-length epic of beauty, barbarism and Burberry...
Re: the poem reads me by daggatolar	ecargo 167.219.88.140	7-Sep-06/5:21 PM
I like wordplay, but not sure what you're going for here.
regarding some deleted poem...	ecargo 167.219.88.140	7-Sep-06/5:24 PM
Not bad for 12 mins to kill--very fun. ;) Purple poltergeists and Ghana booty and melting chocolate priests (my favorite kind)--won't even try to guess, but I had a good time along for the ride.
regarding some deleted poem...	nypoet22 70.149.108.201	8-Sep-06/3:49 AM
grammar nazi says: "Whose will is this?" straightforward image, clear to understand. good sentiment, well expressed if somewhat trite. but oh the grammar...
Re: When I look inside my heart by Engelbert Humpalot	pete 195.92.168.166	8-Sep-06/8:02 AM
made me laugh i'm ashamed to admit ....
Re: End of day poem by ecargo	zodiac 152.18.33.190	8-Sep-06/10:03 AM
Nice. Like richa, with rhythm.
regarding some deleted poem...	nypoet22 70.149.108.201	8-Sep-06/3:15 PM
wacky. i like it!
Re: Coyote Sunsets by DamienDen	nypoet22 70.149.108.201	8-Sep-06/3:21 PM
some beautiful images, some careless errors. shallow wombs and the first two lines are priceless. very strong ending too. bleeding sky image a bit heavyhanded. "a of a" in the 4th line. Buddhas misspelled in the 9th.
Re: Let's praise great Britannia's golden days of now and then by Edna Sweetlove	nypoet22 70.149.108.201	8-Sep-06/3:40 PM
this reads like a novella. i greatly enjoyed the continuous stream of vitriol in the various pieces of the puzzle, but found myself wanting some sort of break to make the whole rant seem a bit less haphazard. also, i find the end a little disturbing. personally i could do without getting my shite blown up by usama's crew.
Re: End of day poem by ecargo	Ranger 86.131.56.81	8-Sep-06/11:34 PM
Love some of the passages in here - 'seeds cling to stem', 'hidden labyrinths', 'curved shield of pewter sky' etc. I also like the way you begin with 'new gold' (of young grain, I assume) as opposed to the older amber light. Metre isn't my strong point, but 'over' was awkward to me, I'd have felt more comfortable with 'across', somehow. Line 13 I think should be 'Cicadas' (unless it's the churn of a cicada, not sure what you're getting at there). I do really like this though, the gentleness and natural beauty. Makes me think of home :-)