Wow. Nice stuff! Beautiful relationship between family and winter season. When I read read this poem I am truly captured by the vivid imagery. Poem possess tone, color and flow. Indeed, this is a work of art. Best poem to read this New Year. Keep sharing here.

An emotional and heart-warming piece. Poem really touches my soul, because we are all descendants from Adam and Eve. God will intervene in this earthly matter. Well done! Your heart and soul is in the right place.

Nice write--very nice. I'm adding it to my favorites.

Tenses in the first sentence are mismatched (built and launch) If your father bought you a kite, why did you make one? Or did you simply assemble it? If you mean something metaphorical, it’s not clear.

At first I thought you were in tune with the writer of Hebrews: “Let us consider how we may spur one another on toward love.” But the choking twist in the last verse has a sinister tone that sounds self-sacrificial. If you want the coaxing and stimulation of the first part, then consider a softer ending. Overall I like it.

I returned to cast my vote for this wonderful verse. poem full of imagination and creativity. A first prize winner in any contest on earth!

Just shoot yourself already woman.

Title reminds me of a classic verse from Kipling's "The Lesson": It was my fault, and my very great fault-- and now I must turn it to use. I have forty million reasons for failure, but not a single excuse. So the more I wipe and the less I stain the cleaner the pants I shall get-- I've had a lavatorial lesson; I may take off my diaper yet!

I rather thought theese meant you were a southerner.

This poem has an overtone of a persecuted jew about it.

good use of words with a tale to tell listed in precise way and evocotive a good poem.

This is fabulous! Wow, I really like the creative juice in this poem. You demonstrate a superb storytelling ability, regarding the land of fantasy. Awesome power you have with paper and pen. In the Land of Forgotten, we travel down "The Road of Light" Be humble and ask God for wisdom.

A priceless poem you have here. Loose pocket change is always a plus in this modern age. Life revolves around "The Coin" A superbly written piece. Keep sharing.

It’s a good theme, but too wordy for my taste. Stanza 2, for example, might shorten to something like this, and be more forceful: Did they mention the hearts broken by bullets, the eyes plucked like ripe olives, The bodies raped by hard thrust of hate?

I count 10 spelling and grammar mistakes. Which means that I considered the poem worthy of counting them. It’s a nice twist on the usual beauty-of-the-fall-colors theme, a good start. Please clean it up and re-post.

One of your best. Good "images" in the red-glow darkroom. Been there, done that.

I am humbled by the warm and generous words. God bless and keep sharing here.

you should have just gone down to the pier and waved.

this is really good. it doesn't have anything particularly memorable...it's just solid. i love it. 10

This is good--I really like the last stanza.