By the way, "ignited light" is a great phrase!

Wonderful! Hey Email me so I can tell you what happened.

great wordplay and refreshingly unpretentious.

Don't look at me. I give the Green Five!

not sure about the rhyme at the end of each verse, too many words seem to interfere in between, such as whom and you. overall pleasant,

No compassion outside the group?

Frear of reality being less than expected or not so tasty?

Whoops my spelllng leaves. My fingers are afraid to hit the right keys.

Gilt and glitter and blood galore. A feast on bandages of dried crust of gore.

The empty womb does not ache for you. Avoidance of life does not releave the hunger.

cool i like this poem. -8-

This is very good. Interesting how this piece might be interpreted. Some might say that the poor chap in question is a fool who cannot accept reality and spends his life running in place (and into walls!!!) On the other had, and this is how I see it, the chap here is a visionary who is not afraid to think out of the box. He does not shrug his shoulders and say "that's just the way it is, you can't do anything aobut it" Now, for sure this person is going to get more than his share of lumps in his life. He will need to be strong because he will oftenb fail and will often be the subject of ridicule and criticism. But here's the catch..every person whose ever accomplished anything truely great in their lives has approcahed the world in this manner. Perhaps I've taken this piece way beyond it's intended destination....that's just the way it touched me. Really enjoyed it! -10-

I prefer when you write outside your conversational vernacular. It's leaner and actually reads like a poem. Except for the Palestinian HotRod one for which that treatment was perfectly suitable. I prefer stealthy to stealth. Otherwise, I agree with richa.

Lots of good stuff in here, for sure. Just need to cut the fat. I think hatters hare must be thinking of "The Trees" in stanza 2, but the style and metaphor are really nothing like Peart at all. I certainly wouldn't take that as a criticism, anyway.

difficult to read, I think limericks usually have lines 1,2,5, roughly the same beat and long, and lines 2,4 the same beat and short. It could be inversed but this is neither. As for the story being stupid, limericks kind of are, I have not read many limericks that are on serious issues, I think it is the zip and loudness that lends itself to silliness.

natures skyscraper... I like this (even without the apostrophe) and I was digging the poem until if flopped over and turned melodramatic. K.I.S.S.

Punctuation would not hurt.

The lack of punctuation and using the “line break” pause takes a poem that makes little sense and makes it make even less sense.

I argree, whole-heartedly, so here's another of my gree tens for you...

Erm... And...For NO REASON! MUAHAHAHA AHKKDEERBLITHPUTY sorry i just inhaled my roaching cherry. Blahch.