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Trapped Rat (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer
life is a labyrinth and i am the mazed rat that thinks he can not walk through walls.

Down the ladder: The Supreme Mind

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.6666665
Weighted score: 5.717177
Overall Rank: 1898
Posted: October 2, 2003 5:24 PM PDT; Last modified: October 2, 2003 5:24 PM PDT
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[n/a] poetandknowit @ | 2-Oct-03/8:52 PM | Reply
Lovely. And such original thinking to go along with it.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ > poetandknowit | 3-Oct-03/3:59 PM | Reply
[9] deleted user @ | 2-Oct-03/8:53 PM | Reply
Great concept and style. I love the message behind your words.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ > deleted user | 3-Oct-03/3:57 PM | Reply
Ah, italy-angel, glad you enjoyed it, ill probly be posting it soon on entrances and exits for them folks to nitpick at will.

[10] Joe-joe @ | 3-Oct-03/11:15 AM | Reply
This is very good. Interesting how this piece might be interpreted. Some might say that the poor chap in question is a fool who cannot accept reality and spends his life running in place (and into walls!!!) On the other had, and this is how I see it, the chap here is a visionary who is not afraid to think out of the box. He does not shrug his shoulders and say "that's just the way it is, you can't do anything aobut it" Now, for sure this person is going to get more than his share of lumps in his life. He will need to be strong because he will oftenb fail and will often be the subject of ridicule and criticism. But here's the catch..every person whose ever accomplished anything truely great in their lives has approcahed the world in this manner. Perhaps I've taken this piece way beyond it's intended destination....that's just the way it touched me. Really enjoyed it! -10-
[10] Joe-joe @ > Joe-joe | 3-Oct-03/11:19 AM | Reply

I just reread the piece..I thought it said.."could walk through walls". It does dramatically change the meaning..but still good.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ > Joe-joe | 3-Oct-03/3:55 PM | Reply
happy you liked it joe, i had this one stashed in my workshop for awhile and added the final touches yesterday.
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