Jesus.

The rocks in the pocket grabbed me, the rest held me.

Didn't I read this one yesterday?

Hmmmmm, I think I like this one a little better but the old ones good too. -9.43986-

This one is not as good as the other, imho - but still offers an interesting read. Some of the language seems heavier.

Yep. Caught me nappin'. Awake now. I thought those asterisks were stars - by the end I realized it was the money shot.

Great title. Is that some forshadowing there at the end?

Bloody awful.

Dear god -- the roses are already dead in your part of the world? They're only just starting to grow leaves here... I'm not sure about the last line, though I can't put my finger on the reason why. It may be because it rhymes with 'face' and there is no other rhyming involved (unless you count the dying and drying, which is a bit far-reaching for a rhyme).

Nice to see a poeme about me at last. Your friend, Everyone.

Splendid, I especially like the inclusion of my omni-back.

Actually there is a fair amount assonance here. Jam packed with stuff here. Excellent, sir.

Feet is better than roots, because of the implication of dangling feet, a hanging. Think about deleting the parenthetical phrase. (You probably already have)

3 for length. 3 for humour. 2 for Max Headroom. 2 for Woostuh. -2 for the off beat stanzas. 1 for nuttyness.

If this doesn't see the top, I swear I'm gonna realease a dump truck full of Bazooka bubble gum on someones head.

pity the lilies can't be made to last, as well. but prhaps that's why they are sweetest of all.

Safe!

A vase holds living lilies as a frame holds a face. The lilies will die too, and then what? It's quite possible I'm all wet, but it's an enjoyable bath. I wish you'd be more clear sometimes.

Yes, please delete the () line. What is so unusual about hail in the spring? Maybe where you live it is. Were you standing in the hail? Maybe the tree sheltered you from the hail, as it protected the flowers.

Should that be "flow. Fall"? The last line is good, but I'd leave out "Everything and"