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The Pedestal (Free verse) by Richard I donât even know your name,
But that mystery only deepens my intrigue.
I would like to say that I am content,
Just to know that you exist.
Life is full of sadness and empty of remorse,
It gives and takes indiscriminately.
But every so often it smiles upon us,
And in that radiant glow, we are found fortunate.
It is enough for me to bask in the light of your smile,
And drown in the depths of your eyes.
Up the ladder:
EarthWaterAir - Hey! Look! IM MR FIRE!
Down the ladder:
i realize
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Posted: March 18, 2004 11:37 PM PST; Last modified: March 18, 2004 11:37 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.904638 Overall Rank: 9836 Comments:
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Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199
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19-Mar-04/4:10 AM
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"The Pederast" more like LOLTTM WTF?
>>>>GOOGLE CLICHE COUNT<<<<
I donât even know your name (3,900,000!!!) But that mystery only deepens my intrigue. (25) I would like to say that I am content, Just to know that you exist. (126) Life is full of (88,700) sadness (70) and empty of remorse, (11) It gives and takes indiscriminately. (369) But every so often it smiles upon us, (52) And in that radiant glow (239), we are found fortunate. It is enough for me to (2,410) bask in the (62) light of your smile, (807) And drown in the depths of your eyes. (depths: 346, eyes: 531) >>>>GOOGLE CLICHE TOTAL: 3,993,748<<<<
This is the revision for Mr. Google Cliché (zodia):
The Pedestal: Youâre Jane Doe, so what Youâre here, great Life sucks when youâre not lucky Please look at me and smile. WOW! Thatâs art! But it still needs some revision: The Pedestal: You exist, Life Sucks, so smile Not quite there: The Pedestal: You and Life Suck, so smile Ah Ha! Iâve got it! The Pedestal: You suck and smile! THATâS IT! Thank you so much for your insightful comments! I can surely win the Pulitzer Prize for this one!
If I understand this comment right, then you don't believe it is possible to write anything that can be considered poetric except by stringing together meaningless cliches. Have you any idea what a pox-bearing turd-ball of a notion that is?
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